Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and natural: avoid repetitive words (click, pictures) and filler sounds (uh). Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one specific supporting detail and an example using a linking word. Vary vocabulary (photograph/shot/scene) and correct collocations (take photographs, street scenes).

例: I enjoy photographing different views because it helps me remember the places I visit. For example, when I visit a city, I often take photos of the skyline and bustling street scenes to capture the atmosphere.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and one or two specific reasons without repeating words. Use linking words (because, so, therefore) and correct collocations (spacious, crowded). Avoid trailing off and filler sounds. Provide an example to support your preference.

例: I prefer rural views because the countryside is more spacious and peaceful, so I can relax. For instance, I enjoy watching rolling fields and quiet lanes, which feel far less crowded than city streets.

提案: Answer directly and avoid repeating similar ideas. Use one clear reason and a specific example with correct vocabulary (refresh my mind, rejuvenate). Replace vague words (spacious and wide) with precise phrases. Keep to 2–3 sentences and use linking words (because, for example, so).

例: I prefer views in my own country because the countryside where I live is peaceful and familiar, which helps me unwind. For example, I often walk in the evenings along quiet lanes to clear my mind and feel rejuvenated.

× Yes, I love clicking the pictures of the different views because it helps me to memorise the places I visit.

✓ Yes, I love taking pictures of different views because it helps me memorize the places I visit.

Use 'take pictures' instead of 'clicking the pictures' — 'take' is the natural verb collocation with 'pictures'. Also remove 'the' before 'different views' because general plural noun doesn't need a definite article. 'Memorise' can be spelled 'memorize' (both OK; choose one consistent form). Ensure verb forms fit present simple habitual action.

× For example, whenever I go to any city, I always uh, click the pictures of the landscapes and I love to take the click pictures of the street.

✓ For example, whenever I go to a city, I always take pictures of the landscapes and I love to take pictures of the streets.

Replace 'click the pictures' and 'take the click pictures' with 'take pictures' — correct collocation. Use 'a city' instead of 'any city' for naturalness here. Use plural 'streets' or 'the street' depending on meaning; plural is more general. Remove filler 'uh'. Ensure consistent present simple for habitual actions.

× Well, I prefer the views of the rural areas because the countryside areas are much wider and because of the spacious space, it helps to relax better rather than the crowdy, uh, urban areas because.

✓ Well, I prefer views of rural areas because the countryside is more spacious, and that helps me relax better than crowded urban areas.

Remove redundant 'the' before general plural nouns ('views of rural areas'). 'Countryside areas' is redundant; use 'the countryside' or 'rural areas'. 'Much wider' is awkward for space; 'more spacious' is natural. 'Spacious space' is redundant. 'Crowdy' is incorrect spelling; use 'crowded'. Remove duplicated 'because' and filler 'uh'. Use 'than' for comparison rather than 'rather than' following 'better'.

× I prefer the views in my own country because I live in a countryside and there is spacious and wide.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I live in the countryside and it is spacious and wide.

Use 'the countryside' not 'a countryside' — 'countryside' is usually uncountable with 'the'. Remove 'the' before 'views' when speaking generally is optional but 'views in my own country' is fine. 'There is spacious and wide' is ungrammatical; use 'it is spacious and wide' or better 'it is spacious'.

× Uh, for example, I I always go to walk in the evening which helps me to refresh my mind and regenerate.

✓ For example, I always go for a walk in the evening, which helps refresh my mind and energize me.

Correct structure is 'go for a walk' not 'go to walk'. Remove filler and duplicated 'I'. Use a comma before the relative clause 'which helps...'. 'Regenerate' is awkward; use 'energize' or 'refresh' to convey restoring energy. Also use infinitive omission: 'helps refresh' is natural.