Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 用简洁自然的句子回答，注意语法错误并减少冗余。可以把第一句改为更地道的表达，去掉多余词汇；举例时用连词衔接更流畅。建议练习固定句型（I enjoy... because...）并注意动词形式。

例: I really enjoy taking photos of different scenes because each place has its own character. For example, cityscapes often reveal local culture and everyday life, with buildings, markets and people combining to tell a story.

提案: 回答思路正确，但有句子未完成且细节不够具体。注意完整表达，不要中断句子；用连接词增加逻辑（for instance, moreover）。加入具体细节如季节、声音、颜色会更生动。

例: I prefer rural views because the countryside’s natural scenery helps me relax and clear my thoughts. For instance, in spring I enjoy walking through green fields, hearing birdsong and feeling the fresh breeze on my face.

提案: 回答内容有逻辑但句子未完成且重复表达较多。要注意句子完整性，避免以“so I can”未完结。可以用具体对比或个人情感补充理由，并用连接词总结观点。

例: I prefer views in my own country because China’s landscapes are so diverse. For example, there are snow‑capped mountains in the north, the vast Gobi Desert in the west, and beautiful eastern coastlines, so I never run out of places to explore.

× Yes, I'm really like to taking photos of different scenes because I think each one has its own character.

✓ Yes, I really like taking photos of different scenes because I think each one has its own character.

句中“I'm really like to taking”包含多重错误。根据动词短语用法，短语“really like”后面应接动名词（like doing），而不是“I'm really like to taking”。正确用法为“I really like taking…”。建议：去掉“I'm”和“to”，保持“I really like taking…”。

× For example, cityscapes often reveal the local culture and everyday life, with buildings, markets and people that tell a story in contrast.

✓ For example, cityscapes often reveal the local culture and everyday life, with buildings, markets and people that, in contrast, tell a story.

原句“that tell a story in contrast”中“in contrast”位置不当，使句子读起来有些笨拙。将短语置于更靠近动词的位置（或用逗号分隔）能更清楚地表达“形成对比”之意。建议：把“in contrast”移到靠近动词处并用逗号分隔，或改为更自然的表达如“which contrast with other scenes”。

× For example, I like looking at the open fields, breathing the fresh air and.

✓ For example, I like looking at the open fields, breathing the fresh air, and enjoying the peacefulness.

原句以“and”结尾，缺少并列项，句子不完整，没有给出最后一个并列动作或名词，属于缺动词（或缺并列成分）错误。建议：在“and”后补上一个动词短语或名词，如“enjoying the peacefulness/feeling calm”等，使并列结构完整。

× For example, we have snow capped mountains in the north, vast deserts like the Gobi, and beautiful coastal scenery in the east so I can.

✓ For example, we have snow-capped mountains in the north, vast deserts like the Gobi, and beautiful coastal scenery in the east, so I can take many interesting photos.

原句以“so I can”结尾，未完成句意，缺少主要动词及宾语，导致句子不完整。建议补全“so I can + 动词短语”，如“so I can take many interesting photos”或“so I can enjoy diverse scenery”。此外，“snow capped”应加连字符为“snow-capped”。