Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Говорить более связно и завершать мысли; избегать лишних слов и грамматических ошибок. Начните с чётного тематического предложения, затем добавьте одно-два конкретных примера с деталями (где, когда, что именно вы снимали) и заключение. Следите за артиклями и завершением предложений.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they help me preserve memorable moments and show a place’s beauty. For example, while I was in Istanbul last year I photographed the Bosphorus at sunset, focusing on the colourful sky and the busy boats. I often choose scenes with strong light or interesting compositions to make the photos more striking.

提案: Давать полноценные предложения и избегать повторов; использовать связки для плавного перехода. Сформулируйте утверждение, затем приведите конкретную причину и пример. Следите за согласованием и количеством (singular/plural) и используйте более точную лексику.

例: I prefer rural views because nature offers quieter, more varied scenes such as forests, lakes and mountain ranges. For example, I often hike in the mountains and take panoramic shots of valleys at dawn, which capture mist and layered ridges better than city scenes. This calm atmosphere helps me compose more thoughtful photos.

提案: Быть конкретнее и избегать разговорных конструкций; давать личный опыт и точные названия с кратким описанием. Постройте ответ: общее мнение, затем сравнение/пример и завершение. Избегайте ошибок согласования и повторов прилагательных.

例: I like both, but I especially appreciate photographing scenic spots in my own country because I know the best locations and seasons. For instance, the Oral Mountains offer dramatic rocky ridges and sunrise views, while Kuchang Waterfall creates a powerful, photogenic cascade in the rainy season. Knowing these places lets me plan shoots for the best light and weather.

× For instance, when I was in Turkey, I took a lot of picturesque photos and. She.

✓ For instance, when I was in Turkey, I took a lot of picturesque photos.

This sentence contains a fragment ('and. She.') that breaks sentence structure and leaves a dangling element. Remove the extraneous fragment to form a complete sentence. Suggestion: finish coordinated clauses fully or remove incomplete parts to avoid sentence fragments.

× In fact, I prefer view in rural area because there are a lot of picturesque sites in the nature.

✓ In fact, I prefer views in rural areas because there are a lot of picturesque sites in nature.

The noun forms are inconsistent: 'view' and 'area' should be plural to match general preference statements ('views', 'rural areas'). Also 'in the nature' is incorrect; use 'in nature' without the definite article. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general categories and drop unnecessary articles before uncountable nouns.

× For instance, I really like to take photos in the mountains and I really like to. Photo.

✓ For instance, I really like to take photos in the mountains.

The segment 'and I really like to. Photo.' is a fragmented, ungrammatical continuation. Remove the fragment or complete it with a proper verb and object. Suggestion: avoid leaving incomplete clauses; ensure each conjunction connects two full clauses.

× Actually, my country has a lot of picturesque places where you can do incredible photos.

✓ Actually, my country has a lot of picturesque places where you can take incredible photos.

The verb 'do' is not idiomatic with 'photos'; native usage is 'take photos'. This is a lexical/verb choice issue affecting tense usage in context. Suggestion: use correct collocations like 'take photos' or 'take pictures'.

× For instance, you can visit Oral Mountains or Waterfall Kuchang. It is very beautiful and incredible place.

✓ For instance, you can visit the Oral Mountains or Kuchang Waterfall. They are very beautiful and incredible places.

Several issues: mountain range and waterfall names should be pluralized or formatted ('Oral Mountains', 'Kuchang Waterfall'); the demonstrative and verb must agree in number—use 'They are' for plural 'places'. Also 'place' should be plural 'places' to match. Suggestion: ensure proper noun formatting and subject-verb number agreement; choose singular/plural consistently.