Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 你的回答有清晰的主题句并提供了例子，但存在语法错误、用词重复和部分表述不够自然。建议注意动词时态和搭配（例如 “when I travel” 而不是 “when a travel”），避免冗长重复（如重复提到 landscapes 和 cityscapes），并尝试在句子间使用连接词使表达更流畅。可将回答控制在3-4句内，每句信息明确。

例: Yes, I love photographing different views because it helps me capture special moments. For example, when I travel or go for a walk, I often take photos of landscapes to remember the scenery and how I felt. Also, I sometimes photograph cityscapes at night to capture the atmosphere.

提案: 回答的主旨可以理解，但句子结构混乱且有语法错误（例如 “since now I lived” 应为 “since I now live” 或 “because I live in a city”），表达重复（多次提到 experiences/landscapes/cityscapes）且不够具体。建议先给出直接答案，然后用一两句具体理由并用连接词（because, so, for example）支持，注意动词形式和搭配。

例: I prefer rural views because I already live in a busy city and enjoy peaceful natural scenery. For example, I like hiking in the countryside to see fields and mountains, which feels relaxing after a week of city noise.

提案: 回答表达了个人喜好和理由，但存在口语填充词（uh）、重复和不够具体的问题（what attractions? what about the culture excites you?）。建议去掉填充词，提供具体细节或例子（比如喜欢尝试当地食物或参观历史景点），并使用连贯语句。控制在3句内更自然。

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new cultures and landscapes. For instance, I love visiting historic towns and trying local food, which gives me a deeper sense of the place. This adventurous side makes traveling abroad very exciting for me.

× Yes, I enjoy taking photos at different views because I think it helps me to capture and preserve special moments and memories.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because I think it helps me capture and preserve special moments and memories.

句中“taking photos at different views”不自然，通常搭配为“take photos of something”（拍某物的照片）。另外“helps me to capture”中不需要不定式的“to”，常用结构是“help someone do something”。建议记住固定搭配：“take photos of”以及“help sb do sth”。

× For example, when a travel or go for a walk, I often take pictures of landscapes and cityscapes so I can remember how the place looked and how I felt at the time.

✓ For example, when I travel or go for a walk, I often take pictures of landscapes and cityscapes so I can remember how the place looked and how I felt at the time.

原句“When a travel or go for a walk”缺少主语“I”，且“a travel”是错误用法。应使用动词不加冠词的结构“when I travel”。建议注意主语必须完整，动词前不要随意加冠词。

× If I have to choose, I prefer views in rural areas since now I lived in urban areas and I'm a person who likes to experience different kind of experiences and I want to see various kind of landscapes and cityscapes.

✓ If I have to choose, I prefer views in rural areas since I now live in an urban area and I'm someone who likes to have different experiences and I want to see various kinds of landscapes and cityscapes.

原句“now I lived in urban areas”时态错误，应使用现在时“now I live”。“lived”是过去式，不符合语境。另有几处搭配问题：应为“an urban area”或“urban areas”；“different kind of experiences”应为“different experiences”或“different kinds of experiences”；“various kind of landscapes”应为“various kinds of landscapes”。建议理清时态（现在情形用现在时）并使用正确的复数/搭配形式。

× So I would rather to go to rural areas like go for a holiday.

✓ So I would rather go to rural areas, like going on holiday.

短语“would rather”后不加不定式“to”，应直接跟动词原形“go”。另外“like go for a holiday”不符合习惯表达，常用“like going on holiday”或“go on holiday”。建议记住“would rather + 动词原形”和使用“go on holiday / go on a holiday / go on holidays”。

× Personally, I definitely would choose to experience different kind of attractions in other countries, uh, because as I mentioned above, I think it is easy to regard me as a very adventurous person.

✓ Personally, I would definitely choose to experience different kinds of attractions in other countries, because as I mentioned above, I think it's easy to regard me as a very adventurous person.

“different kind of attractions”搭配错误，应为“different kinds of attractions”或“different kinds of attraction”。另外“would definitely”位置可调整为“would definitely choose”。建议记住可数名词复数与“kinds of”的固定用法。

× So for me to experience a different culture, it's very exciting.

✓ So for me, experiencing a different culture is very exciting.

原句“So for me to experience a different culture, it's very exciting.” 结构不自然。更地道的表达是“for me, experiencing... is very exciting”或“This is very exciting for me.” 建议使用名词化的动名词短语作主语或将句子改为完整主语谓语结构。