Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 첫 문장은 직접적으로 질문에 답하고 있어 좋지만 표현이 다소 단순하고 약간의 문법/자연스러움 문제가 있습니다. 예를 들어 'a travel' 대신 'travelling' 또는 'going on trips'를 써야 자연스럽습니다. 추가 설명을 할 때 연결어를 사용해 답변이 더 유창하게 들리게 하세요. 또한 구체적인 예시(어떤 풍경을 좋아하는지, 어떤 장비를 쓰는지 등)를 한두 문장 덧붙이면 점수가 오릅니다.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different landscapes, especially mountains and coastal scenes. For example, I often go on trips with my camera to capture sunrise over the sea, because the colors and atmosphere are really striking.

提案: 좋은 균형 답변이지만 발음/철자 실수('skyscrapers' 등)와 어휘 선택을 다듬어야 합니다. 또한 'and so on' 같은 모호한 표현 대신 구체적인 예시나 이유를 덧붙여 응답을 풍부하게 만드세요. 연결어(However, On the other hand 등)를 사용해 대비를 분명히 하면 더 효과적입니다.

例: I enjoy photographing both urban and rural scenes. In cities, I like capturing skyscrapers and busy streets because of the dynamic light and reflections. On the other hand, in rural areas I prefer photographing mountains and coastlines for their peaceful atmosphere and natural textures.

提案: 문법과 문장 완성도가 떨어집니다 ('other country'→'other countries', 'when I visit to New York'→'when I visited New York', 미완성 문장 'However in my hometown.'). 답변은 명확한 주제문과 이유, 예시로 구성해야 합니다. 비교를 할 때는 연결어를 사용하고 고유한 세부사항(특정 장소나 느낌)을 추가해 문장을 완성하세요.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy discovering new and exotic scenes. For instance, when I visited New York, the bright lights and towering buildings felt completely different from home. In contrast, my hometown is more familiar and quieter, which is why I usually seek out foreign cities when I travel.

× I also enjoy going on a travel in order to take pictures.

✓ I also enjoy going on a trip in order to take pictures.

'a travel' is incorrect article + noun collocation in English; use 'a trip' or 'travel' without an article. Use 'a trip' for a countable journey. Suggestion: replace 'a travel' with 'a trip'.

× In urban areas there are high rise sky rapers and in rural areas I like taking pictures of mountains, coastal lines and so on.

✓ In urban areas there are high-rise skyscrapers, and in rural areas I like taking pictures of mountains, coastlines, and so on.

Multiple issues: 'high rise' should be hyphenated as 'high-rise' when used as a compound adjective; 'sky rapers' is misspelled and should be 'skyscrapers'; 'coastal lines' is not the standard compound noun—use 'coastlines'. Also add a comma before 'and' for clarity. Suggestion: hyphenate compound adjectives, fix spelling, and use standard nouns.

× I prefer views in other country because I always like new and exotic views.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I always like new and exotic views.

'other country' should be plural 'other countries' or preceded by an article ('another country') depending on meaning. Here context contrasts own country vs other countries, so use plural. Suggestion: use appropriate number or 'another' for singular reference.

× For example, when I visit to New York, the big lights and the city itself is new for me.

✓ For example, when I visit New York, the bright lights and the city itself are new to me.

Do not use 'visit to'; the verb 'visit' takes a direct object: 'visit New York'. 'Big lights' is better as 'bright lights'. Subject-verb agreement: 'the big lights and the city itself' is plural, so use 'are' not 'is'. Use 'new to me' rather than 'new for me'. Suggestions: remove unnecessary preposition, ensure subject-verb agreement, and prefer natural adjective 'bright'.

× However in my hometown.

✓ However, in my hometown, the sights are more familiar to me.

This is a sentence fragment lacking a verb and complete idea. Add a main clause to complete the contrast (for example, say that sights are familiar or less novel). Suggestion: always include a subject and verb to form a complete sentence and make the contrast explicit.