Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar, and use linking words. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms, and give one or two specific examples. Avoid repetition and filler words.

例: I don't usually take many photographs, but I will take pictures when I see something beautiful. For example, I often photograph beaches at sunset or interesting old houses because they have striking colors and details.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and two coherent reasons with specific vocabulary. Use linking words (first, second) correctly, avoid hesitations, and choose accurate words (skyscrapers, transport).

例: I prefer urban views for two reasons. First, I grew up in a city, so I feel comfortable with its atmosphere. Second, I enjoy the sight of skyscrapers and busy streets because they look lively and modern.

提案: Answer directly and provide specific reasons with clear structure. Correct grammar (possessive: my country's views), avoid repetition, and name particular attractions or landscapes to be more vivid.

例: I prefer views in my own country because many places near my city are famous tourist attractions. For example, the nearby mountains and coastal scenery are well preserved, and there are historic sites that make the landscapes interesting.

× Actually I'm a person who who don't like taking picture or don't usually taking picture but if I see a or came across a beautiful views like a beach, a forest or some pretty house I can take in the picture.

✓ Actually I'm a person who doesn't like taking pictures or doesn't usually take pictures, but if I come across a beautiful view like a beach, a forest, or a pretty house, I might take a picture.

Errors: 'who who don't' has duplicated 'who' and wrong verb agreement; plural/singular: 'taking picture' should be 'taking pictures' or 'take a picture'; 'don't' should be 'doesn't' because subject 'a person who' is singular (third person); 'don't usually taking picture' mixes auxiliary and -ing form incorrectly; 'came across' is past tense but context requires present/habitual 'come across'; 'beautiful views' should be singular 'a beautiful view' or keep plural with corresponding article; 'take in the picture' is awkward — use 'take a picture' or 'take pictures'. Suggestion: simplify clauses, ensure subject-verb agreement ('doesn't'), use correct verb forms ('take' not 'taking' after auxiliary), and consistent singular/plural nouns.

× Actually, I prefer view in urban area for several reason.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in urban areas for several reasons.

Errors: 'prefer view' needs plural 'views' to match general preference; 'urban area' should be plural or preceded by an article if singular; 'reason' should be plural 'reasons' when giving multiple points. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general categories and match count (views, areas, reasons).

× Firstly, I, I was born in a city, so I, uh, adapt with a city life.

✓ Firstly, I was born in a city, so I am used to city life.

Errors: 'adapt with a city life' is incorrect collocation; 'adapt to' or 'be used to' are correct. Also redundant commas and filler words removed. Suggestion: use 'am used to' or 'adapt to' followed by noun without article for general activities ('city life').

× And secondly, I like the city view with a lot of, uh, skycropper vehicle and, uh, which.

✓ Secondly, I like city views with many skyscrapers, vehicles, and other urban features.

Errors: 'skycropper' is misspelling of 'skyscraper'; 'city view' should be plural 'city views' for general preference; 'a lot of' followed by nouns needs correct nouns and plural forms; 'which' is dangling and incomplete. Suggestion: use accurate vocabulary ('skyscrapers'), pluralize nouns for general lists, and avoid dangling pronouns.

× Uh, yes, I prefer my city views because because my city, uh, is a famous tourist attraction.

✓ Yes, I prefer my city's views because my city is a famous tourist attraction.

Errors: repeated 'because because' and informal fillers; possessive 'my city views' is better as 'my city's views' to show belonging. Suggestion: remove repetition, use possessive form for clarity.

× The and uh, is have a lot of, uh, beautiful scenery and landscape, mountain and uh, MMM.

✓ It has a lot of beautiful scenery and landscapes, including mountains,

Errors: 'The and uh, is have' is ungrammatical; 'is have' mixes 'is' and 'have'; article 'The' is unnecessary; 'landscape' should be plural 'landscapes' to match 'a lot of'; list items need plural forms and parallel structure. Suggestion: start with 'It has' or 'There are' and use plural nouns for lists, maintain parallelism ('scenery and landscapes, including mountains').