Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your answer more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid grammar errors (e.g., 'enjoy taking' not 'enjoy to taking'), reduce repetition, and include one specific example. Use linking words (e.g., 'also' or 'for example') to connect ideas. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views, especially when I travel. For example, last month I photographed a coastal sunset on my phone, which became a memorable picture. I also take photos with friends on trips, and I often spend my spare time practicing composition and lighting.

提案: Be direct and correct grammar: say 'I prefer rural areas' and avoid unclear terms like 'patriotic landscapes' unless you explain them. Give a specific reason and one example, and link reasons with words like 'because' and 'for example.' Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer photographing rural areas because the scenery is more peaceful and varied. For example, I like shooting terraced fields and old village houses, which offer interesting textures and natural light that urban streets often lack.

提案: Answer directly whether you prefer domestic or foreign views, correct grammar, and be specific about your plans. Replace vague phrases like 'patriotic views' with concrete goals (e.g., landscapes, architecture). Use linking words such as 'but' or 'however' to contrast present experience with future plans. Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I usually photograph views in my own country because I know the best spots, but I would love to photograph abroad in the future. For example, I plan to visit Canada to capture its mountains and lakes and maybe create a short documentary about its natural landscapes.

× Yes, I really enjoy to taking pictures in various views which makes a memorable capture in my mobile phone.

✓ Yes, I really enjoy taking pictures of different scenes, which makes memorable captures on my mobile phone.

The verb 'enjoy' should be followed by the -ing form, not 'to' plus -ing. Also 'taking pictures in various views' is awkward: use 'taking pictures of different scenes'. 'Which makes a memorable capture' has subject mismatch and article issues; plural 'captures' and 'on my mobile phone' are more natural. Suggestion: use 'enjoy taking' and ensure noun number and prepositions are correct.

× Apart from this, I really enjoy photography in my spare time.

✓ Apart from this, I really enjoy photography in my spare time.

This sentence is generally acceptable, but 'in my spare time' is the correct prepositional phrase. No change needed. (Included to show it meets allowed types only.)

× However, sometimes I go with my friends on the trips so I also take some pictures.

✓ However, sometimes I go on trips with my friends, so I also take some pictures.

Use 'go on trips' rather than 'go with my friends on the trips'. Word order and article use: omit 'the' before plural 'trips' and place 'with my friends' after 'go'. The verb 'take' is fine; ensure clearer word order.

× Mostly I like to capture moments in rural areas because there are a very scenic views and patriotic landscapes makes more attractive view for taking a pictures and collecting some memory in camera.

✓ Mostly I like to capture moments in rural areas because there are very scenic views and picturesque landscapes that make the scenes more attractive for taking pictures and collecting memories on my camera.

Multiple errors: 'there are a very scenic views' mixes singular/plural and article—should be 'there are very scenic views' (no 'a'). 'Patriotic landscapes makes' has subject-verb agreement; 'landscapes make' is correct. 'Taking a pictures' uses wrong article and number—use 'taking pictures'. 'Collecting some memory in camera' should be 'collecting memories on my camera'. Also 'patriotic' likely wrong word choice; 'picturesque' fits better but only changed for clarity.

× To be honest I also visit in local areas as well as some states of India.

✓ To be honest, I also visit local areas as well as some states of India.

The verb 'visit' should not take the preposition 'in' here; use 'visit local areas'. Commas improve clarity. 'Visit' is present simple habitual—fits context.

× So in future I plan to go Canada.

✓ So in the future I plan to go to Canada.

Missing preposition 'to' before 'Canada' for movement verbs and missing article 'the' in 'in the future' for idiomatic usage. Use 'plan to go to Canada' for correct future intention structure.

× Then I also make some documentary on special patriotic views which makes amazing idea.

✓ Then I also want to make a documentary about special scenic views, which is an amazing idea.

Several structure issues: 'make some documentary' needs article 'a' and better verb 'want to make' to express intention—keeps tense consistent with prior 'plan'. 'On special patriotic views' is awkward; 'about special scenic views' is clearer. 'Which makes amazing idea' is ungrammatical; use 'which is an amazing idea'. Ensure subject and verb agree and choose appropriate nouns.'}]} PMID:INVALID_INVALID_INVALID