Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 表达要更简洁并保证句子完整，避免重复和语法错误；补充一两句具体说明原因或情境，并使用连接词使句子更连贯。例如说明哪类景观或曾有的经历。

例: Not really. I'm not very good at composing landscape photos, so I often forget how to arrange the elements to make a balanced picture. Therefore, I prefer to enjoy the view with my eyes rather than taking photos, especially when I'm at a viewpoint with a wide panorama.

提案: 注意用词准确和句子流畅，修正语法和搭配错误；增加具体细节来支持观点（例如举例说明乡间活动或景色），并用连接词增强逻辑。

例: I prefer rural areas because they are quieter and less crowded than cities. In the countryside I can see open fields and wildlife, breathe fresh air, and relax when I go for long walks along country lanes.

提案: 回答需更清晰并完成未说完的句子，避免语法错误并提供具体例子说明情感联系；使用连接词（because, for example）使结构更明确。

例: I prefer the views in my own country because I have lived here for a long time and the scenery is familiar. These places remind me of home and happy memories; for example, walking through nearby old towns often brings back memories of family gatherings and childhood trips.

× I don't like taking pictures of different views because I'm not skilled at taking pictures if I'm when I'm when I'm in the top of the landscape, I don't know how to arrange these elements so the picture looks balanced, so I just like to enjoy my eyes.

✓ I don't like taking pictures of different views because I'm not skilled at taking pictures. When I'm at the top of a landscape, I don't know how to arrange the elements so the picture looks balanced, so I just like to enjoy the view with my eyes.

句子中存在冗长且混乱的从句以及不正确的短语使用（“when I'm when I'm when I'm in the top of the landscape”重复且不自然；“enjoy my eyes”表达错误）。根据动名词结构，‘taking pictures’ 作动词宾语是可以的，但需要把句子拆成更清晰的句子并使用正确的介词短语 ‘at the top of a landscape’ 和固定搭配 ‘enjoy the view with my eyes’。建议将重复部分删去，分两句表达，保持动词形式不变。

× I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and might less crowded than cities.

✓ I prefer rural areas because they are peaceful and might be less crowded than cities.

句中缺少系动词 ‘be’ 导致短语 ‘might less crowded’ 不完整。情态动词 + 动词原形结构要求在这里使用 ‘might be’ 加形容词 ‘less crowded’。建议记住情态动词后若接形容词需加 ‘be’（表示可能的状态）。

× In the countryside you can enjoy world open Greenfield wildlife, breath fresh air and feel very relaxed when walking around.

✓ In the countryside you can enjoy wide open green fields and wildlife, breathe fresh air and feel very relaxed when walking around.

原句中形容词和名词的搭配不正确（‘world open Greenfield’ 混乱且大小写错误），且 ‘breath’ 拼写为名词应为动词 ‘breathe’。应使用固定短语 ‘wide open green fields’ 表示广阔的绿色田野，并把动词形式改为 ‘breathe’。建议注意形容词顺序、名词复数形式以及动词/名词拼写的区别。

× I prefer the views of the of my old country because I have lived here for a long time and I'm familiar with the sceneries.

✓ I prefer the views of my home country because I have lived here for a long time and I'm familiar with the scenery.

句中有多余的介词短语 ‘of the of my old country’ （重复使用 ‘of’），并且 ‘sceneries’ 用法不当，英语中通常用不可数名词 ‘scenery’ 表示景色。将 ‘old country’ 改为更自然的 ‘home country’（若语境要求保留 ‘old’，可改成 ‘my old country’，但要去掉多余的 ‘of the’）。建议去掉重复介词，并使用不可数名词 ‘scenery’。

× Familiar scenery often records me of the belongings and good memories.

✓ Familiar scenery often reminds me of my belongings and good memories.

原句结构错误，动词 ‘record’ 用法不当且搭配错误，正确表达应使用 ‘remind someone of something’。另外需要加上物主代词 ‘my’ 来修饰 ‘belongings’。建议学习并使用固定搭配 ‘remind someone of something’ 来表达让人想起某事物。

× For example, when walking around in the old nearby cities, always bring.

✓ For example, when walking around the nearby old towns, I always feel nostalgic. (或根据原意：For example, when I walk around nearby old towns, it always brings back memories.)

原句不完整，缺少主语和谓语（‘always bring.’ 无明确定语或宾语）。需要补全句子以表达完整意义。可用 ‘it always brings back memories’ 或者改为主语 ‘I always feel…’。建议重写句子以包含完整主谓结构并明确要表达的内容。