Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ваш ответ хороший по содержанию, но его можно сделать более естественным и сжатым: начните с чётного тематического предложения, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретные детали и завершите коротким заключением. Избегайте повторов (например, "appreciate and like") и ненужных слов (например, "so yeah"). Также держите общий объём ответа до 3–4 предложений. Используйте связку причинной логики (because, so) для ясности.

例: I love taking photos of different scenes because they capture memories of particular moments. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city streets to remember how a place felt. I enjoy looking back at these pictures because they remind me of people and places I've visited.

提案: Ответ не очень структурирован и содержит колебания и повторы ("kinda ambiguous", "rural rural"). Лучше дать чёткий выбор в теме, затем пояснить причину и привести один конкретный пример. Избегайте разговорных вставок и лишних слов, сократите до 2–3 предложений и используйте связки (however, because, for example) для логичности.

例: I don't have a strong preference because I appreciate both urban and rural views. Urban scenes interest me for their architecture and busy atmosphere, while rural landscapes appeal to me for their peace and natural beauty. For example, I enjoy city skylines when travelling and quiet countryside walks at weekends.

提案: Ответ понятен, но содержит языковые ошибки и неуклюжие фразы ("watching sense", "nationally important", "the other"). Сформулируйте чёткое тематическое предложение, объясните причину и приведите конкретный пример. Используйте корректную лексику (views, landscapes, landmarks) и правильные предлоги (in my country, in other countries).

例: I enjoy views from my own country because they have personal and cultural significance for me. However, I also like views in other countries, especially impressive landmarks like skyscrapers, since they offer a different perspective as a tourist. For instance, I love seeing historic sites at home but also admire modern skylines abroad.

× I adore taking pictures of different scenes because I think that it also contains some memories of the moment.

✓ I adore taking pictures of different scenes because I think that they also contain some memories of the moment.

The subject 'pictures' is plural, so the verb should be 'contain' not 'contains'. Use 'they' to refer back to 'pictures'. Suggestion: ensure pronoun number matches its antecedent and use plural verb forms with plural nouns. Grammar problem type's ID: 10

× I really appreciate and like watching all these photos after some time.

✓ I really enjoy looking at all these photos after some time.

The verb combination 'appreciate and like watching' is awkward; 'enjoy looking at' is a natural collocation. 'Look at' is a better verb for viewing photos than 'watch'. Suggestion: prefer natural verb+object collocations and simplify redundant verbs. Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× Uh, to be honest, in this question I'm kinda ambiguous because in some cases I like watching urban views.

✓ Uh, to be honest, I'm a bit undecided because in some cases I like looking at urban views.

'Ambiguous' is not correct for a person's feeling; 'undecided' or 'unsure' is appropriate. 'Kinda' is informal; 'a bit' is clearer. Use 'looking at' instead of 'watching' for views. Suggestion: choose adjectives that correctly describe personal states and use appropriate verbs for viewing. Grammar problem type's ID: 26

× However, in different in other moments I would like to see rural rural sense because I think that each of them has their own value for me.

✓ However, at other times I prefer rural scenes because I think that each of them has its own value for me.

Remove the duplicated word 'in' and the repeated 'rural'. Use 'at other times' or 'on other occasions' instead of 'in different in other moments'. 'Rural scenes' is the correct phrase; 'sense' is incorrect here. Use 'its' to agree with singular 'each'. Suggestion: avoid repetition, choose correct nouns ('scenes'), and ensure pronoun agreement with 'each'. Grammar problem type's ID:11

× It is interesting because I love watching sense in my own country because it's nationally important for me.

✓ It is interesting because I love seeing scenes in my own country because they are nationally important to me.

Replace 'watching sense' with 'seeing scenes' or 'viewing scenes'. 'It's nationally important for me' is vague; better 'they are nationally important to me' with plural agreement. Suggestion: use clear nouns and match verb and pronoun number. Grammar problem type's ID:3

× On the other hand, I like watching the nature and the other, for example skyscrapers from another countries because it truly interesting for me as a tourist.

✓ On the other hand, I like seeing nature and, for example, skyscrapers from other countries because they are truly interesting to me as a tourist.

Do not use 'the nature' in general contexts; use 'nature'. Remove 'the other'—it is unclear. Use 'other countries' (no article before plural countries). 'It truly interesting' lacks a verb; use 'they are truly interesting'. Ensure pronoun and verb agree with plural subjects. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary articles, ensure subject-verb agreement, and use clear parallel structure. Grammar problem type's ID:11