Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and concision, and add one specific example to make the answer more natural and informative. Keep answers to a maximum of five sentences and avoid small hesitations or redundant phrases. Also correct phrasing such as “remind a special moment” to “remember special moments” and use plural/singular consistently.

例: Yes, I love taking photos of different views. For example, when I visited the coast last year I photographed the sunrise over the sea, experimenting with low angles and backlight to capture the colours. I also enjoy sharing my best shots with friends online and learning from their feedback.

提案: Reduce filler words (uh), correct article/noun use, and add one clear reason with a linking word. Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "sunset" not "on sunset") and avoid repeating similar ideas. Keep within five sentences.

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy natural landscapes such as rolling hills, rivers and open fields. For instance, at sunset I often photograph the golden light on the hills, which helps me relax and breathe fresh air. Overall, the countryside feels more peaceful than the city.

提案: Avoid awkward phrasing and hesitations (umm). Use correct tense and clearer structure: state your preference, give two concise reasons with linking words, and provide one specific supporting detail. Replace vague phrases like “I was from there” with “I’m from there.”

例: I prefer views in my own country because I’m from there and there are many places I haven’t explored yet. Additionally, it is more affordable to travel domestically, so I can visit more locations and take more photos.

× Taking photos helps me remind a special moment and places, and I really enjoy sharing my pictures on social media with friends.

✓ Taking photos helps me remember special moments and places, and I really enjoy sharing my pictures on social media with friends.

The verb 'remind' is incorrect because 'remind' requires an object being reminded; the correct verb for recalling is 'remember' (verb form). Also 'a special moment and places' mixes singular and plural; use 'special moments and places' to match plural 'places'. Use base form 'remember' rather than an -ing form after 'helps me'. Suggestion: Use 'helps me remember' and match plurality: 'special moments and places'.

× It's much more relaxing and refreshing than uh urban areas.

✓ It's much more relaxing and refreshing than urban areas.

The filler 'uh' should be removed in formal speech. No preposition error per se but article use 'uh urban areas' is awkward; remove the filler and keep 'than urban areas'. Suggestion: Omit filler words in responses: 'than urban areas'.

× I feel good when I take a photos on sunset and uh, enjoy fresh air in the countryside.

✓ I feel good when I take photos at sunset and enjoy the fresh air in the countryside.

Use plural 'photos' without indefinite article 'a'. The preposition for time is 'at sunset' not 'on sunset'. Add definite article 'the' before 'fresh air' to indicate specific air of the countryside. Remove filler 'uh'. Suggestion: Use 'take photos', 'at sunset', and 'the fresh air'.

× Obviously I prefer the views in my own country because I was from there and I haven't explored yet many places and also it's umm, cheaper than umm the other country.

✓ Obviously I prefer the views in my own country because I am from there and I haven't explored many places there yet, and it's also cheaper than other countries.

'I was from there' incorrectly uses past tense; use present 'I am from there' for origin. Word order 'haven't explored yet many places' is incorrect; place 'yet' after the object: 'haven't explored many places there yet'. 'the other country' is awkward—compare with 'other countries' or 'another country'; use plural 'other countries' when generalizing. Remove filler 'umm'. Suggestion: Use present tense for origin, correct adverb placement, and use 'other countries' for comparison.

× That's why I prefer my own country.

✓ That's why I prefer my own country.

Sentence is grammatically correct; no pronoun error. Included to show it's acceptable. Suggestion: No change needed.