Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答整体表达了观点和爱好，但存在语法错误、冗余填充词（如“you know”）和部分不自然的短语（如“keen on to take”）。建议：①用简洁的主题句直接回答（例如：Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes），②去掉口头语并修正动词短语（keen on doing），③补充1-2个具体细节并使用连词使逻辑更连贯。示例句子不要超过5句。

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different scenes because I hope to become a photographer in the future. For example, I often take close-up shots of daily objects like flowers and plants since their textures and colors are interesting. I usually edit these photos slightly and use my favorites as phone wallpapers.

提案: 回答表达了偏好并给出原因，但句子结构混乱、语法和用词错误较多（例如“more prefer”，“the sun sunlight that reflected”），且冗长重复。建议：①用明确的主题句（I prefer rural areas），②使用连词（because, especially）组织原因和例子，③用准确词汇描述光线和拍照效果，最多5句。

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer more natural scenery and peaceful spots for photography. For example, lakes in the countryside are especially beautiful in the morning when sunlight reflects on the water, creating soft colors and reflections. This kind of light helps me capture striking landscape photos.

提案: 答案给出了偏好和原因，但存在语法、重复和表达不准确的问题（如“a modern cities”，“some golden some towers”），以及过多口头语。建议：①直接陈述偏好并给出具体例子，②用准确的名词和形容词描述景点，③使用连词连接句子，保持自然简洁，句数不超过5句。

例: I prefer the views in my own country, especially around my city, Hangzhou. Hangzhou blends modern urban life with traditional sites like West Lake and ancient pagodas, which offer picturesque scenes. These landmarks provide diverse subjects for photography, from tranquil water reflections to ornate architectural details.

× Yes, I really like to take pictures of different views.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views.

此句动词搭配问题：动词“like”后可接不定式或动名词，但在表示爱好时更常用动名词形式“like doing”。建议使用“like taking”以符合习惯用法。

× I'm, I want to be a photographer in the future.

✓ I want to be a photographer in the future.

句中多余的“I’m”导致结构混乱。删除多余部分，保持“I want to ...”的完整句子。

× I'm really keen on to take some photos about the daily objects, you know, such as the plants, the flowers.

✓ I'm really keen on taking photos of everyday objects, such as plants and flowers.

“keen on”后应接动名词（-ing），不能接不定式“to take”。另外介词搭配应为 “photos of something”而不是“photos about”。“daily objects”更自然为“everyday objects”。

× I will use this kind of picture as my phone's wallpaper.

✓ I will use this kind of picture as my phone wallpaper.

“phone's wallpaper”属英语口语可理解，但更自然的表达是“phone wallpaper”作为固定搭配；此处也可直接使用复数“pictures”根据语境决定。

× Well for me I more prefer the rural areas about that views because you know the most of rural areas.

✓ Well, for me, I prefer rural areas for those views because most rural areas...

句子结构混乱：使用了多余词“more prefer”（错误），应直接用“prefer”；“about that views”不合语法，改为“for those views”；“the most of rural areas”应为“most rural areas”。建议简化并重组句子。

× It contains a lot of nature and some breathtaking views of the lakes, especially when the sun sunlight that reflected on the water I can tell a lot of beautiful photos on.

✓ They contain a lot of natural scenery and some breathtaking views of the lakes, especially when the sunlight reflects on the water — I can take a lot of beautiful photos then.

多处错误：主语应为“they/most rural areas”，而非“it”；“a lot of nature”更自然为“a lot of natural scenery”；“sun sunlight”重复，保留“sunlight”；时态与语序问题，使用现在时“reflects”。最后部分“I can tell a lot of beautiful photos on”完全错误，应改为“I can take a lot of beautiful photos then”。

× Well, I really prefer the views in my country.

✓ Well, I really prefer the views in my own country.

在此处使用“my own country”比“my country”更强调归属，语法上两者都可，但“my own country”更自然流畅（非严格错误）。

× This is because I live in a modern cities.

✓ This is because I live in a modern city.

“a”后必须跟单数名词，原句中“a modern cities”数不匹配，改为“a modern city”。

× You know, it's Hangzhou where it's a modern city in the Zhejiang province.

✓ You know, it's Hangzhou, which is a modern city in Zhejiang province.

关系代词从句和介词使用：用“which”引导非限制性定语从句更合适；通常说“Zhejiang province”时可省略冠词“the”。此外在写法上用逗号分隔。

× It has a lot of traditional buildings such as the Westlake or some golden some towers, which is breathtaking.

✓ It has a lot of traditional sights such as West Lake and some golden towers, which are breathtaking.

问题包括名词搭配和数的一致：用“West Lake”而非“the Westlake”；“some golden some towers”重复且错误，应为“some golden towers”；先行词为复数时，关系代词谓语应为复数“are”。