Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答は意味が伝わりますが、文法ミス、繰り返し、発話の途切れがあり、情報が不十分です。改善点：1) 明確なトピック文を最初に述べる（例：Yes, I enjoy taking photos of views when I travel.）。2) 不要な「あー/umm」を避ける。3) 理由を具体的かつ完結に述べ、文を2〜3文にまとめる。4) 過去の具体的な例や感情を1つ加えると説得力が増します。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of views when I travel. I like to capture landscapes and cityscapes because they help me remember the atmosphere of a place. For example, I often photograph sunsets and street scenes to look back on later.

提案: 回答に主張はありますが、文法の誤り、冗長性、具体性の欠如が目立ちます。改善点：1) シンプルなトピック文（I prefer rural views to urban ones.）。2) 理由を一つか二つに絞り、具体例を添える（自然の風景、静けさ、伝統的な建物など）。3) 接続詞（because, for example, so）を使って論理をはっきりさせる。

例: I prefer views in rural areas to those in cities because the countryside offers more natural scenery and traditional buildings. For example, I enjoy walking through small villages where I can see old houses and wide fields, which feel peaceful compared to busy streets.

提案: 主旨は他国の景色を好むことですが、文が途切れ、語彙選択と文法が不自然です。改善点：1) 明確な主張を短く述べる（I prefer views in other countries.）。2) なぜそう思うかを具体的に述べる（different landscapes, cultural sites）。3) 「I can't see in my daily life」の表現を自然に言い換える（I don’t see at home）。4) 例や感情を1つ加えて締めくくる。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural sites that I don't see at home. For instance, I was amazed by the colorful markets and coastal scenery when I visited Thailand, which felt completely new and exciting.

× the reason why I like the taking pictures of different views is that it become the memory when I.

✓ the reason why I like taking pictures of different views is that they become memories for me.

『taking』の前の定冠詞'the'は不要で動名詞の前には一般に置かないため削除します。主語は'it'ではなく複数の写真を指す'they'とし、'become'は三人称複数現在形なので動詞を'become'のまま使えますが補語'memory'は可算名詞なので複数形'memories'にします。また'when I.'の不完全な表現は'for me'などの自然な表現に置き換えます。 Suggestion: remove unnecessary articles before gerunds, match subject number with verb, and use plural for countable nouns or provide a complete clause 'when I ...' if needed.

× Well, yeah, I like views in rural areas rather more than the urban areas because the I think the rural areas have more cultural places than the urban areas and the.

✓ Well, yeah, I prefer views in rural areas to those in urban areas because I think rural areas have more cultural places than urban areas.

'the urban areas'や'do the'のような不要な定冠詞が複数回使われています。一般的な場所を指す場合は冠詞を省略するか'specific ones'を使います。また'prefer A to B'という表現を使う方が自然です。最後に文が中断しているため不要な'and the'を取り除きます。 Suggestion: omit unnecessary 'the' when speaking about general places, use 'prefer A to B', and complete or remove trailing fragments.

× I like views in other countries because in other countries there are many sports and scenery where which I could. I can't. I can't I can see in my daily life.

✓ I like views in other countries because there are many sports and scenic places that I can't see in my daily life.

'where which'は重複した関係詞で誤りです。'scenery'は不可算名詞なので可算の'places'や'adjective scenic'を用いて表現を調整しました。文の途中で'I could. I can't.'と途切れているため、肯定と否定が混在しないように'I can't see in my daily life'と整理しました。 Suggestion: use a single relative pronoun ('that' or 'which'), choose countable/uncountable nouns appropriately, and avoid self-interruptions—complete the clause before moving on.