Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and specific. Start with a clear topic sentence stating you enjoy photographing different views, then give 1–2 specific reasons or examples. Avoid repetition and filler words (uh, like). Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they capture unique scenes and moods. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset because the light creates dramatic colors, and I also shoot quiet countryside landscapes to contrast with the busy urban scenes.

提案: Answer directly and confidently. Begin with a clear statement of preference, then give a specific reason and one brief supporting detail. Avoid hesitation and grammar errors like "I am don't."

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the architecture and vibrant street life. For instance, I like photographing old buildings and busy markets, which offer interesting textures and colors.

提案: Clarify your meaning and give a direct answer with specific reasons. Use correct grammar (e.g., "I prefer views in other countries") and add one or two concrete examples of what you enjoy seeing abroad. Avoid vague phrases and fillers.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I love discovering unfamiliar landscapes and cultures. For example, I enjoy photographing traditional markets in Southeast Asia and historic streets in Europe, which are very different from the places I've seen at home.

× I like, uh, to, uh, show me unique.

✓ I like to capture unique views.

The original sentence uses incorrect pronoun 'me' and awkward structure. The verb 'show' with 'me' does not fit the intended meaning of photographing scenes. Use 'capture' or 'take' with the object 'unique views' to convey photographing. Also remove filler hesitations for clarity.

× I am don't don't understand you very well, but I prefer views in urban areas.

✓ I don't understand you very well, but I prefer views in urban areas.

The phrase 'I am don't' incorrectly combines the auxiliary 'am' with 'do' negation. Use 'I don't' for present simple negation with verb 'understand.' Also remove the duplicated 'don't'. This corrects subject-auxiliary usage and produces a clear present-tense statement.

× I prepare views in other countries because I love to see different views.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I love to see different scenery.

The verb 'prepare' is the wrong word; 'prefer' fits the question about preference. Repeating 'views' is redundant; use 'scenery' or 'landscapes' for variety. Present simple 'prefer' and 'love' are appropriate for stating general preferences.

× I am not, uh, see it in my life.

✓ I have not seen them in my life.

The original uses incorrect progressive 'am not see' and wrong pronoun 'it' for plural 'views.' Use present perfect 'have not seen' to indicate experience up to now, and 'them' or 'those views' as the object. Remove filler words for clarity.