Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and correct grammar. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid repetition, use linking words and provide one specific example. Correct verb forms and articles (e.g., 'taking pictures', 'landscapes', 'a mountain, a river, and lakes').

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it helps me relax. For example, I often photograph landscapes such as a mountain near my town and a nearby river. Also, I usually visit quiet spots at sunrise to capture soft light, which makes the scenes more beautiful.

提案: Give a direct topic sentence, avoid repeating the same adjectives, and add a specific reason or example using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for instance'). Use plural/singular correctly ('rural areas' or 'the countryside').

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are quieter and less crowded. For instance, the countryside near my village has rolling fields and small streams, which help me unwind after a busy week. Therefore, I choose rural views over urban ones for relaxation.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion and correct grammar (e.g., 'I prefer views in my own country'). Provide specific supporting details such as memories or cultural elements, and use linking words to connect ideas. Avoid vague phrases like 'many years'—give more precise time or examples.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I grew up exploring its landscapes and culture. For example, since childhood I have visited coastal cliffs and historic villages, so I appreciate both the natural scenery and local traditions. As a result, I feel more connected to these places than to views abroad.

× Yes, I enjoy taking picture of different views because it makes me feel very happy and relaxed and I like to taking pictures of different landscape like a mountain, river, lakes.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because it makes me feel very happy and relaxed, and I like taking pictures of different landscapes such as mountains, rivers, and lakes.

Errors: 'taking picture' should be plural 'taking pictures' (count noun with plural) and parallel structure requires 'I like taking' not 'I like to taking'. 'Different landscape' should be plural 'different landscapes' and list items need plural forms for general categories; use 'such as' for examples. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct gerund forms after verbs like 'enjoy' and after 'like' use either 'to' + base verb or gerund; here use gerund for parallelism. Make nouns plural when referring to types or examples.

× So I often visit the different location to capture to capture natural beauty of place.

✓ So I often visit different locations to capture the natural beauty of places.

Errors: 'the different location' is incorrect article and number; use plural 'different locations'. Duplicate 'to capture to capture' is a repetition. 'natural beauty of place' needs definite article 'the' before 'natural beauty' and plural 'places' or 'the place'. Suggestion: Use plural forms for repeated activities and include appropriate articles ('the') when referring to a specific noun phrase.

× I prefer the view in rural area because the rural area has a very beautiful environment and it has a quiet and peaceful environment where people can find more relaxing and refreshing.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because the rural areas have a very beautiful, quiet, and peaceful environment where people can feel more relaxed and refreshed.

Errors: 'the view in rural area' needs plural or article: use 'views in rural areas' generalizing. Repetition 'has a very beautiful environment and it has a quiet and peaceful environment' is redundant; combine adjectives. 'find more relaxing and refreshing' uses wrong verb/adjective forms; use 'feel more relaxed and refreshed.' Suggestion: Use plural when speaking generally about places, combine adjectives correctly, and use appropriate verbs ('feel') with adjective complements ('relaxed', 'refreshed').

× So I like to visit a rural area than urban area.

✓ So I prefer visiting rural areas to urban areas.

Errors: 'like to visit a rural area than urban area' mixes structures incorrectly. Use 'prefer A to B' or 'like A more than B'. Also use plural or articles consistently: 'rural areas' and 'urban areas.' Suggestion: Use correct comparative structure: 'prefer X to Y' or 'like X more than Y', and keep number agreement.

× Of course, I prefer the view in my own country because I have lived here from many years and since my childhood I have visited many beautiful places, so I really appreciated from the natural beauties and cultural of my own country.

✓ Of course, I prefer the views in my own country because I have lived here for many years, and since my childhood I have visited many beautiful places, so I really appreciate the natural beauty and culture of my country.

Errors: 'the view' should be plural 'views' for general preference. 'have lived here from many years' incorrect preposition: use 'for many years.' 'I really appreciated from the natural beauties and cultural' has wrong tense ('appreciated' past instead of present 'appreciate'), incorrect preposition 'from', awkward nouns 'natural beauties and cultural' — use 'natural beauty and culture.' Suggestion: Use present perfect 'have lived' with 'for' to indicate duration, use present simple 'appreciate' for general feelings, and choose correct noun forms ('beauty', 'culture') without unnecessary prepositions.