Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Améliorez la précision grammaticale et la fluidité. Évitez les hésitations (« uh ») et corrigez les accords (par exemple « your picture » → « a picture », « can be reflect » → « can be reflected »). Raccourcissez et organisez la réponse en une phrase principale claire puis 1–2 détails concrets (où, quel type de paysage, pourquoi). Utilisez du vocabulaire plus approprié comme « scenes », « landscapes », «capture the atmosphere».

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing natural landscapes and city scenes because each place has a unique atmosphere. For example, I like capturing coastal sunsets and urban street life to show different moods.

提案: Rendez la réponse plus naturelle en corrigeant le nombre (« urban area » → « urban areas ») et en utilisant des mots de liaison simples (« because », « for example », « moreover » est correct mais peut être remplacé par « also »). Ajoutez un exemple précis d’un endroit ou d’un bâtiment pour rendre le contenu plus concret.

例: I prefer urban areas because there is always activity and interesting architecture. For example, I like photographing busy café streets and historic buildings in my city because they create lively, photogenic scenes.

提案: Clarifiez la structure et corrigez l’anglais (« they are a variety of them » → « there is a great variety »). Organisez la liste avec des liaisons (« for example », « such as ») et évitez d’enchaîner trop d’éléments sans précision. Donnez un exemple personnel ou une comparaison rapide entre pays pour enrichir la réponse.

例: I prefer views in my own country because there is a great variety of landscapes. For example, we have vibrant city centers, long coastal walks by the sea, and breathtaking mountains, so I can photograph very different scenes without traveling far.

× I love to take a natural beauty variety sceneries and different landscapes.

✓ I love to take pictures of natural, beautiful scenery and different landscapes.

The student used incorrect adjective forms and word order. 'Natural beauty variety sceneries' is ungrammatical. Use 'natural' and 'beautiful' as adjectives before the noun, and 'scenery' is an uncountable noun (not 'sceneries'). Also include 'pictures of' to show what is being taken. Suggestion: reorder adjectives as 'natural, beautiful scenery' and use 'pictures of'. Grammar problem type ID: 13

× Especially taking picture in different cities because I think they all have a different atmosphere that can be reflect and capture with a camera.

✓ Especially taking pictures in different cities because I think they all have a different atmosphere that can be reflected and captured with a camera.

The verbs 'reflect' and 'capture' need to be in the past participle form when used in passive structures with 'can be'. Use 'reflected' and 'captured'. Also 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' and 'in different cities' is fine. Suggestion: use correct participles after 'can be' and pluralize 'pictures'. Grammar problem type ID: 9

× I prefer views in urban area because in the heart of the city more things are going on, for example, people going to cafes or street shows.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because in the heart of the city more things are going on, for example, people going to cafes or watching street shows.

Use plural 'areas' when speaking generally. Also 'street shows' is okay but 'people going to cafes or street shows' is missing a verb for 'street shows'; rephrase as 'people going to cafes or watching street shows' for parallelism. Suggestion: pluralize 'area' to 'areas' and keep parallel verb forms. Grammar problem type ID: 1

× I prefer views in urban area because in the heart of the city more things are going on

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because in the heart of the city more things are going on.

The clause 'more things are going on' is grammatically acceptable; however the original had 'urban area' which should be plural. No third-person singular verb error here. This suggestion reiterates correction for 'area' to 'areas' to match general reference. Grammar problem type ID: 2

× I prefer views in my own country because they are a variety of them, for example, city centers with vibrant atmosphere, seaside where you can walk along the coast, moreover breathtaking mountains.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because there is a variety of them, for example, city centres with a vibrant atmosphere, seaside areas where you can walk along the coast, and breathtaking mountains.

The phrase 'they are a variety of them' is incorrect. Use 'there is a variety of' or 'there are a variety of' (with plural noun). Also 'city centers' needs the article 'a' before 'vibrant atmosphere' and 'seaside' should be 'seaside areas' for clarity. Add 'and' before the final item for correct listing. Suggestion: use 'there is a variety of' and ensure articles and conjunctions in the list. Grammar problem type ID: 22