Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm, but it has several language errors, unclear word choices and is slightly repetitive. Improve by using a clear topic sentence, correcting vocabulary (use 'capture' not 'chapter', 'still life' rather than 'still motion'), and adding one specific reason or example. Keep it concise (max 3–4 short sentences) and avoid filler.

例: Yes, I love taking photographs, especially landscapes and still-life shots. For example, I often photograph sunsets and flowers because their colours and details look great on Instagram. I enjoy composing shots to make them visually pleasing.

提案: This answer is too short, contains repetition and informal fillers, and lacks clear supporting details. Start with a direct topic sentence, then give 1–2 specific reasons with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so'). Avoid repeating words and filler like 'like'.

例: I prefer urban views because I enjoy the energy and variety of city scenes. For example, tall buildings, busy streets and colourful markets give me interesting subjects to photograph.

提案: The response is unclear and contains grammatical errors and hesitations. Give a direct answer (e.g., 'I like both'), then explain with specific differences between domestic and foreign views. Use correct grammar (plural/singular, verb forms) and avoid contradictions. Keep it to 2–3 clear sentences.

例: I like views both in my country and abroad. In my country I appreciate familiar landscapes and historic sites, while travelling I enjoy discovering new scenery and cultures. Either way, I try to photograph anything that catches my eye.

× Yes, I love photography. I like to chapter things like nature and still motion pictures and aesthetic pictures because when I post it in Instagram it looks awesome.

✓ Yes, I love photography. I like to capture things like nature, still-life photos, and aesthetic images because when I post them on Instagram they look awesome.

Problems include incorrect verb choice 'chapter' (should be 'capture'), awkward noun phrases 'still motion pictures' (use 'still-life photos') and 'aesthetic pictures' (use 'aesthetic images'), wrong pronoun 'it' referring to plural 'pictures' (use 'them'), incorrect preposition 'in Instagram' (use 'on Instagram'). Also use commas to separate items. Suggestion: choose correct verbs for actions, match pronouns to plural nouns, and use standard collocations like 'post on Instagram'.

× Actually I prefer views in urban area because urban areas are like more more busy and like.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in urban areas because urban areas are much busier.

Errors: 'urban area' should be plural 'urban areas' to match context (singular/plural issue), unnecessary filler words 'like more more busy and like' are ungrammatical and repetitive. Use comparative 'busier' not 'more busy'. Suggestion: remove fillers, use correct comparative adjective and keep number agreement.

× Actually, I prefer both uh, because in my countries specific areas are looks awesome and in another countries many areas are looking awesome.

✓ Actually, I prefer both, because specific areas in my country look awesome and in other countries many areas also look awesome.

Problems: 'my countries specific areas' should be 'specific areas in my country' (incorrect plural and word order), 'are looks' is incorrect subject-verb form (use 'look'), 'in another countries' should be 'in other countries' (plural/form), and 'are looking awesome' is awkward simple present 'look awesome' is better for general statements. Suggestion: correct noun phrases, use simple present for general facts, and match singular/plural.

× So I will take whether it's good picture or bad picture, I will take it pictures which I wish like it was awesome.

✓ So whether the picture is good or bad, I will take it; I will take pictures that I like or that I think are awesome.

Multiple issues: 'I will take whether it's good picture or bad picture' is ungrammatical—use 'whether the picture is good or bad'. 'I will take it pictures' mixes pronouns and plural nouns; use 'I will take pictures'. 'which I wish like it was awesome' is incorrect relative clause and tense; use 'that I like' or 'that I think are awesome'. Suggestion: use standard 'whether... or...' structure, ensure pronoun-noun agreement, and use clear relative clauses.