Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and directly addresses the question, but it has some hesitations and brief sentence fragments. Improve fluency by removing repetitions, combining short fragments into coherent sentences, and adding one specific detail (where or what kind of scenery) to enrich the response. Use a linking phrase to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I do. Whenever I see a beautiful view, I take a photo to keep on my phone and later share with my friends and family. For example, I often photograph sunsets at the beach because the colours are especially striking.

提案: The main idea is communicated, but frequent hesitations, grammar errors and repetition reduce clarity. Improve by producing a concise topic sentence, correcting grammar (e.g., 'I prefer rural areas' and 'I like being alone and enjoying peace'), and adding a specific example or reason with a linking word (e.g., 'because' or 'for instance'). Keep it within 3–4 sentences to be natural and effective.

例: I prefer rural views because I enjoy quiet and solitude. The peaceful landscapes in the countryside help me relax and recharge, especially when I go for long walks in the woods. For example, a weekend in a mountain village always calms me down.

提案: Your answer shows flexibility and gives an example, which is good. However, reduce hesitations and correct grammar (e.g., 'I can't say I prefer scenery in my own country or abroad'). Use a clear topic sentence, then a linking phrase to introduce the example (e.g., 'for example'), and give one concise detail about the example to make it specific.

例: I can't say I prefer scenery at home or abroad; I appreciate any beautiful view. For example, when I visited Guilin in China, I loved the dramatic limestone karsts and peaceful rivers, which were very memorable.

× Yes I do. When I see the beautiful scenery. I would not, I would not hesitate to take pictures just to keep them in my phones and then later share with my friends and family.

✓ Yes I do. When I see beautiful scenery, I do not hesitate to take pictures to keep on my phone and later share with my friends and family.

The original contains sentence fragments and awkward repetition. 'When I see the beautiful scenery.' is a fragment; it should be connected to the main clause with a comma and verb. 'I would not, I would not hesitate' is repetitive and unnecessary; use 'I do not hesitate' to match the habitual present. 'in my phones' is incorrect plural and preposition; use 'on my phone' or 'in my phone' (commonly 'on my phone') and singular 'phone' for possession. Suggestions: combine clauses correctly, remove repetition, use correct singular form and preposition.

× I do prefer, uh, rural areas. Uh, I'm the kind of person like to stay alone and likes to be quiet and the beautiful sceneries in the rural area always make me feel so calm.

✓ I prefer rural areas. I'm the kind of person who likes to be alone and quiet, and the beautiful scenery in rural areas always makes me feel calm.

Problems: unnecessary filler words and incorrect pronoun/relative clause 'person like to' should be 'person who likes to'. Subject-verb agreement and noun number: 'sceneries' is awkward; 'scenery' is uncountable. 'rural area' should be plural or general 'rural areas'. Also 'always make me' should be 'always makes me' because 'scenery' is singular (or if using 'areas' then 'make'). Suggestions: use 'who' after 'person', use 'likes' for third-person singular, use 'scenery' (uncountable) and match verb accordingly, remove fillers.

× So, and uh, it's it, it is, uh, people can benefit a lot from staying with the nature.

✓ People can benefit a lot from staying in nature.

Problems: extraneous fillers and duplication 'it's it, it is' create clutter. Preposition 'with the nature' is incorrect; the common collocation is 'in nature' and 'the' is unnecessary. Suggestions: remove fillers and use correct preposition and article: 'in nature'.

× Wow, I can't say I prefer, uh, that sceneries in my own country or in, in other countries.

✓ I can't say I prefer the scenery in my own country over that in other countries.

Problems: 'that sceneries' mixes demonstrative 'that' with plural 'sceneries' which is incorrect; 'scenery' is uncountable and should be singular. Repetition and fillers should be removed. Also express comparison properly with 'prefer X over Y'. Suggestions: use 'the scenery' (uncountable) and a clear comparative phrase like 'in my own country over that in other countries.'

× I just the kind of person like to just enjoy the beautiful sceneries.

✓ I'm just the kind of person who likes to enjoy beautiful scenery.

Problems: missing verb after 'I just' and incorrect relative clause 'person like to'—should be 'person who likes to'. 'Sceneries' is awkward; use 'scenery' (uncountable) and omit duplicate 'just'. Suggestions: include the verb 'am', use 'who likes to', and use 'scenery'.

× So like for example, when I was in China, I like to visit the city called Guilin.

✓ For example, when I was in China, I visited a city called Guilin.

Tense mismatch: 'when I was in China' places the action in the past, so the main verb should be past tense 'visited' not present 'like to visit'. Also use 'a city called Guilin' for natural phrasing. Suggestions: match past time expressions with past tense verbs and simplify phrasing.