Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答需要更直接且更流畅，避免填充词（如“uh”）和重复（如“my, my”）。开头给出简洁的主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持（例如你如何练习、用什么设备或喜欢拍哪些景色）。注意句子不要太长，控制在最多五句内。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. It helps me improve my photography skills because I often try new compositions and lighting techniques. For example, I practice shooting at sunrise and sunset to learn how light affects the scene.

提案: 回答要更有条理，用一到两句说明偏好并给出具体原因或例子。避免含糊词（如“you know”）和词汇重复或错误（如“can canteen”）。使用连接词（because, for example, and）使论述连贯。

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer a variety of scenes, such as busy streets, unique storefronts and street cafes. For example, I enjoy photographing colorful shop fronts and the contrast between modern buildings and old architecture.

提案: 需要更礼貌和自然地表达偏好，避免口语化填充（如“you know”）和重复。先给出直接回答，然后说明原因并给出具体预期（例如想看哪些不同景色或文化）。保持句子简洁且条理清晰。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they offer different landscapes and cultural scenes. For example, I would like to photograph traditional markets and coastal villages abroad to experience new colors and architectural styles.

× I like taking pictures of different views because I think, uh, it's a way to practice my, my skills of taking photos in the it's really helpful.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views because I think it's a way to practice my photography skills. It's really helpful.

句中出现冗长且不连贯的结构。原文用了重复的“my, my skills of taking photos in the”导致语序和形式混乱。应使用名词短语“photography skills”来表达“拍照技巧”，并把两个独立句子拆开以提高清晰度。建议使用动名词“taking”或名词“photography”但不要重复。

× Actually I prefer the urban areas because you know in the city you can have many streets like also the some shops, stores like Coffee Cafe, can canteen and so on and.

✓ Actually I prefer urban areas because, you know, in the city you have many streets and shops, such as cafes and canteens.

原句中“the urban areas”与语境不需要定冠词，且“have many streets like also the some shops”词序与用词错误（多余的定冠词和重复词like/also/the some）。将短语精简为“urban areas”，用“shops, such as cafes and canteens”来举例。注意不要重复词语（如“can canteen”）。（本条按“介词/用词不当”归类为ID 11）

× I prefer the viewing other countries because you know, I'm bored with the views in my own country.

✓ I prefer viewing other countries because, you know, I'm bored with the views in my own country.

原句中多了定冠词“the”与动名词搭配不当。表达“我更喜欢欣赏其他国家的景色”应使用动名词短语“viewing other countries”或更自然的“seeing views in other countries”。去掉多余的“the”。

× I lived here every day, I watched them from day to night.

✓ I see them every day; I watch them from morning to night.

原句使用了过去式“lived/watched”与语境（表示习惯）不符，应使用一般现在时表示经常发生的动作。并且“from day to night”更自然应为“from morning to night”。

× So I'd like to see more different views from other countries.

✓ So I'd like to see more diverse views from other countries.

原句“more different views”不自然且冗余，应使用“more diverse views”或“different kinds of views”来表达“更多不同的景色”。同时把句子结构调整得更自然流畅。