Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and natural phrasing, shorten to under five sentences, and add clearer linking words. Be specific about the scenes and use correct plural/singular forms (views, market, swimmers, angles).

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views. For example, I once photographed a busy market, capturing people buying vegetables and local vendors selling food, and later I took pictures of swimmers at the coastal beach. I also experiment with different angles and perspectives so my photos look more dynamic and tell a stronger story.

提案: Fix grammatical errors and unclear phrases, use linking words to compare, and provide specific examples. Replace unclear terms (CDC?) and correct nouns and adjectives (views, perspectives, cities, vast). Keep it concise.

例: I don't prefer one over the other because they offer different perspectives. Urban views, such as crowded streets and markets, are bustling and full of everyday life, while rural landscapes like farms and small villages are vast and show traditional ways of living.

提案: Correct grammar and vocabulary (views, countries, photographed my own country many times). Use linking words and concise structure (topic sentence + 1–2 supporting details). Be specific about what is different and give a clear example.

例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because I have already photographed my own country many times and know its best angles. Traveling abroad challenges me creatively and lets me capture different landscapes and cultures, for example, the colorful markets I photographed in Morocco last year.

× Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different view.

✓ Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views.

The noun 'view' should be plural because 'different' implies multiple kinds of views. Use 'views' for agreement with 'different'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns after words like 'different', 'various', or numbers (e.g., 'different views').

× For example, I once photographed a beauty market capturing people buying food and vegetables and later I saw the coastal scenery and swimmer at the beach.

✓ For example, I once photographed a busy market, capturing people buying food and vegetables, and later I saw the coastal scenery and swimmers at the beach.

Several errors: 'beauty market' is likely incorrect lexical choice; 'busy market' fits context. 'Swimmer' should be plural 'swimmers' to match 'coastal scenery' and multiple people. The sentence uses past simple correctly but needs plural nouns and clearer punctuation. Suggestion: Use commas to separate clauses and ensure nouns match number context.

× I also like experimenting with different angle and perspective to make my photos more dynamic and tell a better story.

✓ I also like experimenting with different angles and perspectives to make my photos more dynamic and tell a better story.

Both 'angle' and 'perspective' should be plural because 'different' implies multiple types. Use 'angles' and 'perspectives' for number agreement. Suggestion: Make both nouns plural when describing variety.

× I don't really prefer one over the other. I enjoy photographing both urban and rural view because they offer different perspective.

✓ I don't really prefer one over the other. I enjoy photographing both urban and rural views because they offer different perspectives.

'View' and 'perspective' should be plural to match 'both' and 'different'. Use 'views' and 'perspectives' for correct number agreement. Suggestion: Ensure consistency in plurality when referring to multiple kinds.

× CDC and are often bustling, energetic and full of everyday life while rural landscapes are greater and can tell a story about nature and traditional ways of living and such as farm and small village community.

✓ Cities are often bustling, energetic, and full of everyday life, while rural landscapes are quieter and can tell a story about nature and traditional ways of living, such as farms and small village communities.

Original has multiple issues: 'CDC and' appears to be a typo; sentence structure is awkward, 'greater' is incorrect adjective, and 'and such as farm and small village community' is ungrammatical. Corrections: replace with 'Cities', use 'quieter' to contrast, pluralize 'farms' and 'communities', and restructure commas for clarity. Suggestion: Proofread for typos and ensure parallel structure in contrasts.

× I prefer photographing view in other country because I already program my own country many time and I know its best angle and perspective.

✓ I prefer photographing views in other countries because I have already photographed my own country many times and I know its best angles and perspectives.

Multiple corrections: 'view' -> 'views', 'other country' -> 'other countries' to be general, 'program' is wrong verb; should be 'photographed', 'many time' -> 'many times', and pluralize 'angles and perspectives'. Also change tense to present perfect 'have photographed' to indicate experience. Suggestion: Use correct verb and plural forms; use present perfect for past experiences that relate to the present.

× Travelling abroad give me a creative challenge and let me capture different landscape and culture will keep my photography fresh and inspiring.

✓ Travelling abroad gives me a creative challenge and lets me capture different landscapes and cultures, which keep my photography fresh and inspiring.

Subject-verb agreement: 'Travelling abroad' (singular activity) requires 'gives' and 'lets' (third person singular). Also 'landscape and culture' should be plural 'landscapes and cultures'. The clause 'will keep' was mismatched; use 'which keep' to refer back to 'landscapes and cultures'. Suggestion: Ensure verbs agree with the subject and clauses are connected properly; pluralize nouns when referring to multiple types.

× For example, I love photographing the colorful market in Morocco last year.

✓ For example, I loved photographing the colorful markets in Morocco last year.

When referring to a specific past time 'last year', use past tense 'loved' not present 'love'. Also pluralize 'market' to 'markets' if referring to general colorful markets experienced, or keep singular with an article ('the colorful market'). Suggestion: Match verb tense to the time expression and pluralize if appropriate.