Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, use correct grammar, avoid fillers, and give one or two clear reasons with specific details. Start with a topic sentence that answers the question, then add a supporting detail using a linking word. Also correct tense and noun forms (e.g., 'my photography skills' not 'my taking pictures skills').

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often study other photographers’ work online to learn new ideas and techniques, because observing their compositions helps me improve my photography skills.

提案: Answer directly, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement and verb forms), avoid repetition, and give specific supporting details with linking words. Mention particular aspects you like (architecture, shops, cafes) and one brief reason or example.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the tall buildings and lively streets. For instance, there are many interesting shops and cafés near my home, so I often go out with friends to take photos of modern architecture and street scenes.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence, then add a specific reason and an example. Fix grammar (e.g., 'recently', 'talk with people'), avoid redundancy. Mention what kinds of views or cultural features you enjoy abroad to make your answer more vivid.

例: I prefer views in other countries because I enjoy experiencing different cultures and landscapes. For example, I would love to visit historical sites and colorful markets abroad to practice my English and meet people from different backgrounds.

× Yeah, sure, because, uh, I taking pictures skills is not good.

✓ Yeah, sure, because my picture-taking skills are not good.

The phrase 'I taking pictures skills' is ungrammatical. A noun phrase 'picture-taking skills' should be used and the subject should agree with the plural noun 'skills', so use 'my' and the plural verb 'are'. Also 'picture-taking' is the correct compound noun form. Suggestion: rephrase to 'my picture-taking skills are not good.'

× Uh, so I often, uh, listen the others views that I think I can uh, improve my take pictures levels, Yeah.

✓ So I often listen to other people's opinions because I think I can improve my photography skills.

Several problems: 'listen the others views' needs the verb 'listen to' and 'others views' should be 'other people's opinions' or 'other people's views'. 'Take pictures levels' is incorrect; use 'photography skills' or 'ability to take pictures'. 'Improve' takes an object, so 'improve my photography skills' is correct. Suggestion: use 'listen to other people's opinions' and 'photography skills.'

× I prefer in urban areas because I think it's very convenient for me and it have so many tall buildings around my house.

✓ I prefer urban areas because I think they're very convenient for me and there are many tall buildings around my house.

Do not use 'prefer in'; prefer is followed directly by the noun: 'prefer urban areas.' 'It have' is incorrect: use 'there are' for existence and plural agreement 'they're' for 'urban areas.' 'So many' is acceptable but here 'many' is enough. Suggestion: say 'I prefer urban areas' and 'there are many tall buildings around my house.'

× So in my spare time I'd also like to going shop with my friends.

✓ So in my spare time I'd also like to go shopping with my friends.

After 'would like to' the base verb form should be used, not the -ing form. Use 'go shopping' (verb + -ing as a noun phrase) or 'go to the shops.' Suggestion: 'I'd like to go shopping' or 'I'd like to go to the shops.'

× So I I prefer in urban areas.

✓ So I prefer urban areas.

There is an unnecessary repeated pronoun 'I I' and 'prefer in' is incorrect; 'prefer' should be followed directly by the noun phrase. Suggestion: remove duplicate and use 'I prefer urban areas.'

× I prefer views in other countries because I like different cultures.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I like experiencing different cultures.

The sentence is mostly acceptable, but 'like different cultures' is vague; 'experiencing different cultures' is more natural when talking about travel. Suggestion: use gerund 'experiencing' to show the action you enjoy.

× To be honest, I want to go abroad.

✓ To be honest, I want to go abroad.

This sentence is grammatically correct. No change needed.

× For recently I I really want to go abroad because I want to improve my English and talk about with different people.

✓ Recently I really want to go abroad because I want to improve my English and talk with different people.

Problems: 'For recently' is incorrect — use 'Recently'. Remove duplicate 'I'. 'Talk about with different people' is ungrammatical; use 'talk with different people' or 'talk to different people.' 'Talk about' requires an object (what to talk about). Suggestion: 'Recently I really want to go abroad because I want to improve my English and talk with different people.'