Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, clarity and relevance. Start with a clear topic sentence answering the question, correct verb forms, and give one or two brief reasons using linking words. Avoid repetition and unrelated phrases.

例: No, I don't really enjoy taking pictures of different views. I rarely take photos because I prefer to focus on my studies, so I usually carry a book instead of a camera when I go out.

提案: Clarify preference and give specific reasons. Use correct vocabulary (prefer, urban, rural) and cohesive linking words (because, for example). Keep to two or three concise sentences and avoid fillers.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the variety of architecture and lively street scenes. For example, city parks and cafes help me relax and stimulate my mind more than quiet countryside views.

提案: Make the response direct and specific. Correct mistakes (prefer to see/visit), avoid contradictions, and give one clear example of a landscape you prefer. Use linking words (because, for example) and limit to max five sentences.

例: I prefer views in other countries because they often offer more varied landscapes. For example, I enjoy visiting coastal areas and mountain scenery abroad, since we don't have many of those landscapes at home and I find them more beautiful.

× No, I don't really. I don't really taking a picture in a different views because I'm gonna learn at signing or.

✓ No, I don't really. I don't really take pictures of different views because I'm going to learn about signing or something.

The student used an incorrect verb form 'taking' after 'don't' (auxiliary do requires base verb) and incorrect noun number 'a different views' (singular article with plural noun). Also 'gonna' is informal and 'learn at signing or' is unclear; corrected to 'going to learn about signing or something' to be grammatical and clearer. Suggestion: after 'do/does/did' use the base verb (take), and match article and noun number (pictures or a different view). Use standard 'going to' in formal contexts.

× I profile views in urban areas 'cause they are have natural views in your relaxing yourself, you know, and it's, uh, it's a making your body and your brain into.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because they have natural scenery that helps you relax, and it benefits your body and brain.

Multiple issues: 'profile' is incorrect verb form of 'prefer'; corrected to 'prefer' (spelling). 'In your relaxing yourself' used wrong prepositions and reflexive pronoun; corrected to 'helps you relax'. 'They are have' is ungrammatical; use 'they have'. 'It's a making your body and your brain into' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'and it benefits your body and brain'. Suggestion: use correct verb 'prefer', use 'helps you relax' for the effect, and simplify the clause to 'benefits your body and brain'.

× I prefer to senior in other countries because they have often have a more varied landscape and famous natural side.

✓ I prefer to travel to other countries because they often have more varied landscapes and famous natural sites.

'Prefer to senior' is incorrect word choice; likely intended 'travel to'. 'They have often have' duplicates auxiliary; corrected to 'they often have'. 'Landscape' should be plural for general statement, and 'natural side' is incorrect noun; corrected to 'natural sites'. Suggestion: choose the correct verb (travel), avoid duplicated words, and use plural nouns when referring generally.

× For example, I don't like to visit countries with a mountainous or coastal lines that we don't have any country since I find it those views more beautiful.

✓ For example, I like to visit countries with mountainous or coastal landscapes that we don't have in my country because I find those views more beautiful.

The original has conflicting negatives ('I don't like to visit' then praises views) and article/number errors: 'a mountainous or coastal lines' mixes singular article with plural 'lines' and wrong nouns; corrected to 'mountainous or coastal landscapes'. 'We don't have any country' is incorrect; corrected to 'we don't have in my country'. Removed the incorrect negative 'don't' before 'like' to match intended meaning. Suggestion: ensure articles match noun number, remove contradictory negatives, and use clear reference ('my country').