Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid vague phrase "another aspect of things"; specify what you notice (texture, lighting, mood) and give a brief example.

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy photographing scenes from different angles because it helps me capture unique lighting and textures. For example, shooting a street market from above shows the colour patterns, while a low angle highlights the stalls' details.

提案: Clarify the place name and give specific reasons. Use a direct topic sentence, then support it with concrete details and a linking word. Avoid uncertain language like "might be"; state what you mean.

例: I prefer rural areas because they have abundant greenery and natural features. For instance, coastal countryside often combines sandy beaches and nearby hills, which create varied landscapes to photograph.

提案: Make the answer more natural and specific. Begin with a clear preference, then give concrete reasons and an example. Replace vague phrases like "another type of building" with precise details (architecture style, colours, historical context).

例: I like both, but I prefer views in other countries because they expose me to different architectural styles and cultures. For example, visiting Europe allowed me to photograph Gothic cathedrals and colourful townhouses that are uncommon at home.

× Yes, I like taking pictures from different angles because it allows me to find another aspect of things.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures at different angles because it allows me to find another aspect of things.

Use of preposition: 'take a picture at an angle' or 'from different angles' can both work, but in this context 'at different angles' is more natural when referring to varying perspectives while photographing. Suggestion: use 'at different angles' to sound more idiomatic.

× I prefer views in Good Love area because it's full of natural greens and it might be the beaches and the mountains.

✓ I prefer views in the Good Love area because it's full of natural greenery and has beaches and mountains.

Multiple issues: missing article before place name ('the Good Love area'), incorrect noun phrase 'natural greens' (use 'natural greenery'), and awkward modal 'it might be the beaches and the mountains.' Use simple present 'has beaches and mountains' to describe features. Suggestion: include 'the' before the area name, replace 'natural greens' with 'natural greenery', and use 'has' to list features.

× I like both, but I prefer foreign countries view because it broadens my horizons and we can see another type of building.

✓ I like both, but I prefer views of foreign countries because they broaden my horizons and I can see different types of buildings.

Problems: 'foreign countries view' needs plural and correct preposition ('views of foreign countries'), subject agreement ('they broaden' to match plural 'views'), and 'we can see another type of building' is awkward—use 'I can see different types of buildings' for clarity and consistency. Suggestion: make 'views' plural, use 'of' after 'views', match verb number to subject, and use 'different types of buildings'.