Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, word choice and fluency. Begin with a clear topic sentence, avoid mistakes like 'picturing different view' and 'capturing Mary', and limit answer to 2–4 concise sentences. Use correct verb forms and plural/singular agreement, and provide one specific supporting detail linked with a connector (e.g., 'For example').

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing different views because photography helps me capture memories I might otherwise forget. For example, when I travel I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes so I can remember the atmosphere and share the experience with friends.

提案: Focus on clarity, correct vocabulary and sentence structure. Start with a clear preference sentence, then add 1–2 specific reasons using linking words like 'because' or 'which'. Replace awkward phrases ('watching you', 'find out') and fix grammar ('It's make me'). Keep it concise and avoid repetition.

例: I prefer rural views because they are surrounded by nature, such as trees, rice fields and mountains, which help me feel relaxed. For example, walking through a rice field and listening to birds makes me feel refreshed and satisfied.

提案: Make the answer coherent and grammatically correct. Start with a direct statement of preference, give a clear reason (e.g., familiarity or lack of travel experience), and provide one concrete example. Correct verb forms ('have never been abroad', 'to capture') and avoid vague phrases like 'and even those'.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I have never traveled abroad and I feel more familiar with local places. For example, my country offers diverse scenery—from modern skyscrapers in the city to mountains and natural parks—that I enjoy photographing.

× Yes, I enjoy picturing different view because photography help me capturing Mary and appreciate moment I might otherwise forget.

✓ Yes, I enjoy picturing different views because photography helps me capture memories and appreciate moments I might otherwise forget.

Errors: 'different view' should be plural 'different views' to match 'different' and general meaning (singular/plural issue). 'photography help' requires third person singular agreement 'helps' (subject-verb agreement, ID 27 but listed under plural issue here because it relates to number). 'capturing Mary' seems to be a typo: likely 'capture memories' — corrected to 'capture memories'. 'appreciate moment' needs plural 'appreciate moments'. Suggestion: make nouns plural when referring to general, multiple items; ensure verb agrees with singular subjects; choose correct noun 'memories' rather than 'Mary'.

× For example, when I travel, I often photograph landscape and cityscape to remember the atmosphere and share this experience with my friends.

✓ For example, when I travel, I often photograph landscapes and cityscapes to remember the atmosphere and share these experiences with my friends.

'landscape and cityscape' should be plural 'landscapes and cityscapes' when speaking generally (quantifier/number). 'this experience' should be plural 'these experiences' to match multiple photographs and occasions. Suggestion: use plural forms when talking about repeated or general activities.

× Well, I do enjoy watching you in the rural area because the rural area is a place where I find out it is surrounded by the nature, the tree, the rice field, the mountain and even the natural things that where it allow me to feel relaxed and stay connected with them.

✓ Well, I do enjoy being in rural areas because the countryside is a place where I feel surrounded by nature: trees, rice fields, mountains and other natural elements that allow me to feel relaxed and connected to them.

Multiple pronoun and wording errors: 'watching you in the rural area' is wrong pronoun and verb — likely intended 'being in rural areas'. 'the rural area' vs 'rural areas' — use plural/generic. 'find out it is surrounded by the nature' is incorrect structure and article use; correct to 'feel surrounded by nature'. 'the tree, the rice field, the mountain' should be plural without 'the' when listing general items. 'that where it allow me' contains extra words and wrong pronoun/verb; correct to 'that allow me'. Suggestion: use correct pronouns (I, me), simpler verbs ('be' and 'feel'), remove unnecessary articles, and ensure subject-verb agreement.

× It's make me really satisfied.

✓ It makes me really satisfied.

Subject-verb agreement: 'It' is third person singular and requires 'makes' not 'make'. Suggestion: ensure verbs agree in number and person with their subjects.

× Well, I would definitely say that I prefer the view in my own country because I would never been to abroad.

✓ Well, I would definitely say that I prefer the views in my own country because I have never been abroad.

'I would never been to abroad' mixes conditional 'would' with past participle incorrectly and has incorrect preposition 'to abroad'. Correct is present perfect 'have never been abroad' to express lifetime experience. Also 'the view' -> 'the views' to speak generally. Suggestion: use present perfect for life experiences and correct preposition 'abroad' without 'to'.

× So yeah, own country.

✓ So yeah, my own country.

Missing possessive pronoun 'my' (pronoun error but primarily sentence fragment/structure). Also original fragment lacks subject; corrected to concise phrase 'my own country'. Suggestion: include possessive when referring to one's country.

× In my own country, there are a lot of things to see, to capturing and even to experience.

✓ In my own country, there are a lot of things to see, to capture and even to experience.

'to capturing' is incorrect infinitive form; after 'to' use base verb 'capture'. This is an infinitive form issue (verb + -ing). Suggestion: use parallel structure with infinitives: 'to see, to capture, and to experience'.

× There are a lot of skyscrapers, the nature, the mountain and even those.

✓ There are a lot of skyscrapers, natural areas, mountains and so on.

Inconsistent article use and number: 'the nature' and 'the mountain' are awkward general references; use plural or general nouns like 'natural areas' and 'mountains'. 'and even those' is vague — replace with 'and so on' or similar. Suggestion: use consistent plural forms and clearer general terms.