Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically accurate, make your response more concise and coherent, and add one specific example. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give a linked supporting detail using correct tense and plural forms. Avoid repetitive phrases and finish within 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I like to capture spontaneous moments in nature. For example, last week I photographed a pair of sparrows feeding their chicks in a tree, which showed their careful behaviour and made a memorable shot.

提案: Answer directly with a clear topic sentence and provide a specific reason with a connecting phrase. Correct repetition and clarify the comparison between urban and rural areas. Keep it within 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer urban views because cities offer a variety of scenes and architecture that I find interesting. For instance, tall buildings, busy streets and colourful markets give me many opportunities to take diverse photographs.

提案: Give a clear, coherent reason and use specific details or an example. Avoid unclear phrases and incorrect grammar; explain what you mean by 'my people' and 'create his house'. Use linking words to connect ideas and keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer views in my own country because they reflect familiar daily life and cultural details I understand. For example, I enjoy photographing neighbours building traditional houses and community markets, which tell stories I can relate to.

× Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I saw a bird or a animals I suddenly feels like I should capture the moment.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures of different views because when I see a bird or an animal I suddenly feel like I should capture the moment.

Errors: 'saw' uses past tense while the general preference is expressed in present tense, so use 'see' (present). 'a animals' mixes singular and plural; use 'an animal' (singular) with correct article. 'feels' is third person singular form but the subject is 'I', so use 'feel'. Suggestion: Keep verbs consistent in present tense when stating habitual reactions and match subject-verb agreement and articles ('an' before vowel sound).

× The way they enjoy flying in sky and also animals, what are they doing with their child?

✓ The way they enjoy flying in the sky is beautiful, and I wonder what the animals are doing with their young.

Errors: Missing article before 'sky' — should be 'the sky'. Sentence structure is fragmented; combine ideas into two coordinated clauses. 'animals, what are they doing with their child?' is unclear and ungrammatical; use 'I wonder what the animals are doing with their young' for clarity and correct noun choice. Suggestion: Use articles where needed and restructure the sentence to form a complete thought.

× I prefer views in city life because there is a building and also the view we can we can see many types of things which we can't see in our urban areas.

✓ I prefer views of city life because there are many buildings, and we can see many kinds of things that we can't see in rural areas.

Errors: 'in city life' is better phrased 'of city life'. 'there is a building' uses singular where plural 'there are many buildings' fits. Repeated 'we can' and 'urban areas' vs 'rural areas' confusion: speaker contrasted city with rural, so 'rural areas' is correct. Use 'kinds of things' not 'types of things which we can't see in our urban areas.' Suggestion: Use plural with 'there are' for multiple items, avoid repetition, and ensure correct contrasting prepositions and terms.

× I prefer views in my country because in other country I can't see where my people do whatever they're doing.

✓ I prefer views in my country because in other countries I can't see how my people live or what they do.

Errors: 'in other country' needs plural or article: 'in other countries' or 'in another country'. 'where my people do whatever they're doing' is informal and unclear; use 'how my people live or what they do' for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct number (singular/plural) with 'other country/countries' and choose clearer verbs for describing people's activities.

× In my country I can see about create his, his or her house and might be.

✓ In my country I can see how people build their houses and other aspects of their lives.

Errors: This sentence is ungrammatical and fragmented: 'see about create his, his or her house and might be' contains wrong verb forms and unclear phrasing. 'create his house' should be 'how people build their houses' and use plural possessive 'their' for generalization. 'and might be' is incomplete. Suggestion: Rewrite to express a complete idea, use correct verb forms ('build') and appropriate possessive pronouns ('their').