Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول أن تكون إجابتك أكثر تنظيماً ووضوحاً، وتجنب التردد بكلمات مثل "uh"، واذكر تفاصيل محددة أو سببًا لاهتمامك للتوسيع. استخدم جملة موضوعية ثم دعمها بتفاصيل قصيرة (مثلاً ما الذي يعجبك في شروق الشمس أو البحر أو تصوير الحيوانات).

例: Yes, I love taking pictures of different views. For example, I enjoy photographing sunrises because of the rich colors and the calm atmosphere, and I like seaside scenes for their reflections and movement; I also capture animals to show natural behavior and details.

提案: اجعل إجابتك أكثر دقة وابتعد عن التكرار. ابدأ بجملة واضحة تُجيب على السؤال ثم قدم سببًا محددًا مرتبطًا بالتصوير، مع استخدام أدوات ربط بسيطة لتوضيح الفكرة.

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer more natural subjects like trees and wildlife. In particular, rural scenes provide varied textures and peaceful backgrounds, which make photos feel more authentic and interesting.

提案: كن أكثر تحديدًا واصل أفكارك بدلاً من التوقف فجأة. اذكر أمثلة ملموسة لِما يميز المناظر في بلدان أخرى واستخدم ربط لتوضيح الفرق بين الداخل والخارج.

例: I usually prefer views in other countries because they often have unique landscapes and architecture. For instance, in Paris I enjoy the historic cityscapes, while in parts of the US I like wide open national parks; these differences inspire me to take varied and memorable photos.

× Yeah, absolutely. I like taking pictures of different, uh, views like sunrise or the sea. Uh, also I like to take pictures of trees and animals from.

✓ Yeah, absolutely. I like taking pictures of different views, like the sunrise or the sea. I also like to take pictures of trees and animals.

The original sentence has awkward phrasing and an incomplete prepositional phrase 'from' at the end. Remove the stray 'from' and add the definite article 'the' before 'sunrise' to sound natural. Also combine the short clauses for clarity. Suggestion: avoid trailing prepositions and use 'the sunrise' or simply 'sunrise' depending on context. Grammar problem type ID: 10

× Actually I love them both but I prefer rural areas because of the natures and I love nature and trees and animal and it's make the picture more normal.

✓ Actually I love both, but I prefer rural areas because of nature. I love trees and animals, and they make the pictures more natural.

Errors: 'the natures' is incorrect plural and article use; 'animal' should be plural; 'it's make' mixes subject and verb form. Change to 'nature' (uncountable), pluralize 'animals', and use 'they make' to agree with plural subject. Also use 'natural' instead of 'normal' to convey a correct meaning. Grammar problem type ID: 12

× Actually, I prefer the view in other countries because it's different. Whenever I go to Paris or to America, it's a different nature and a lot of.

✓ Actually, I prefer views in other countries because they are different. Whenever I go to Paris or the United States, the scenery is different and there is a lot to see.

Problems: 'the view in other countries' is singular while referring generally to multiple views; 'it's a different nature' is unnatural phrasing; sentence ends incomplete 'a lot of.' Change to plural 'views' or use 'the scenery' and correct tense/structure. Replace 'America' with 'the United States' for formality if desired. Finish the thought with 'a lot to see.' Grammar problem type ID: 10