Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition (e.g., "the the"). Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details with linking words. Watch pronunciation and sentence boundaries so answers stay within about 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I love photographing different views. I have been taking photos since childhood, and recently I bought an iPhone and a camera because the phone’s camera quality is excellent. In addition, I enjoy filming short videos and editing them to share on social media.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence then add one or two specific reasons with linking words. Avoid hesitations and unfinished phrases (e.g., "I mean"). Use precise vocabulary (countryside, landscapes) and correct articles.

例: I prefer rural areas to urban ones. Because I grew up in the countryside, I enjoy being surrounded by trees and wildflowers, and the fresh air makes me feel more relaxed and energetic than city life does.

提案: Clarify vocabulary ("relay" is incorrect here) and avoid vague phrases like "different vibes" without examples. Start with a direct statement, then support it with specific examples of places or landscapes and a brief reason.

例: I prefer the natural scenery in my country, Algeria. For example, the Sahara offers dramatic dunes, the northern coast has sandy beaches and blue seas, and the Atlas Mountains provide lush valleys — these diverse landscapes impress me more than what I have seen abroad.

× I love taking pictures, filming videos and even editing them.

✓ I love taking pictures, filming videos, and even editing them.

Missing Oxford comma is not strictly a grammar category here but relates to clarity; however comma use is punctuation. Keep as present participle list; adding a comma before 'and' improves clarity when listing three actions.

× I enjoy doing this and it's not something new to me because I have been doing it since I was a child and I actually bought an iPhone just for it because the the quality is amazing and I also got a camera.

✓ I enjoy doing this; it's not new to me because I have been doing it since I was a child, and I actually bought an iPhone just for it because the quality is amazing, and I also got a camera.

Repeated 'the the' is a typo and 'it's not something new to me' is wordy; replacing with 'it's not new to me' is clearer. Punctuation fixes (semicolon and commas) clarify sentence structure. These changes fall under article/word choice and sentence structure corrections.

× I definitely prefer rural areas because I was born in a countryside so I never, I mean a place where I'm surrounded by trees, flowers, landscape, etcetera.

✓ I definitely prefer rural areas because I was born in the countryside, a place where I'm surrounded by trees, flowers and beautiful landscapes.

Use 'the countryside' not 'a countryside'. 'Landscape' as a countable concept here should be plural 'landscapes'. Remove filler 'so I never, I mean' and replace with clearer phrasing. These are article and countability issues.

× I feel so alive and fresh, which is a feeling the city doesn't give me.

✓ I feel so alive and refreshed, which is a feeling the city doesn't give me.

Use 'refreshed' (adjective) rather than 'fresh' to describe a person's feeling. This is an adjective choice linked to pronoun referent and natural collocation.

× When it comes to nature, I prefer my country Algeria, because each and every relay offers different views, different vibes, different landscape which not every country can offer.

✓ When it comes to nature, I prefer my country, Algeria, because each region offers different views, different vibes and different landscapes that not every country can offer.

'Each and every relay' is incorrect: 'relay' is the wrong word; likely 'region' was intended. 'Each and every' is redundant; 'each' or 'every' suffices. 'Landscape' should be plural 'landscapes'. Added 'that' to introduce the relative clause. These are quantifier, word choice and agreement issues.

× My country really impresses me.

✓ My country really impresses me.

Sentence is grammatically correct. No correction needed; included here to explicitly state it fits the context and needs no change.