Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Make your response more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (use plural/singular, verb forms), and give one specific reason with a linking word. Avoid redundancy and keep to under five sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. I usually photograph landscapes when I travel because photos help me remember the places I visit, and they cheer me up when I feel bored. For example, I often take seaside photos that remind me of trips with my family.

提案: Give a concise topic sentence and add one specific supporting detail with a linking word to make the answer coherent. Correct grammar (singular/plural, articles) and use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'countryside', 'scenery').

例: I prefer views in rural areas because the countryside has more natural scenery, such as trees, birds and open fields. For example, I enjoy walking along quiet country lanes where I can listen to birdsong and appreciate the peaceful atmosphere.

提案: Start with a clear statement, correct the place names and use linking words to add a brief reason and an example. Avoid repetition and ensure sentences are grammatically correct.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful natural places. For instance, Bangladesh offers scenic spots like Sundarbans, Cox's Bazar and Rangamati, which I love for their unique landscapes and wildlife.

× Yes I like taking picture but I have one thought picture is memory.

✓ Yes, I like taking pictures, but I think a picture is a memory.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' when speaking generally (plural issue, but covered here by verb+ -ing context); 'I have one thought' is unnatural—use 'I think'. Also article 'a' needed before 'picture'. Improve fluency by using 'a picture is a memory' to express the idea clearly.

× So when I travel new place and beautiful places then I take pictures because it memorized me when I feel bored.

✓ So when I travel to new and beautiful places, I take pictures because they remind me when I feel bored.

Use 'travel to' with 'place' (preposition error) and plural 'places'. 'Memorized me' is incorrect; use 'remind me' (present tense) to indicate a habitual effect. 'They' refers to 'pictures' (pronoun agreement). Also add commas for clarity.

× In my opinion rural area is best because rural area have lot of natural beauty like trees, birds and another natural element.

✓ In my opinion, rural areas are best because rural areas have a lot of natural beauty, like trees, birds, and other natural elements.

Use plural 'rural areas' when speaking generally and match the verb 'are/have' (subject-verb agreement). Insert article 'a' before 'lot'. 'Another natural element' should be 'other natural elements' for parallel plural listing. Also add commas for clarity.

× That's why I always prefer rural areas.

✓ That's why I always prefer rural areas.

Sentence is grammatically correct; included here to note subject-verb agreement is fine. No change needed.

× I prefer my own country because my country has lots of beautiful and natural places.

✓ I prefer my own country because it has many beautiful natural places.

Replace repetitive 'my country' with pronoun 'it' for smoothness. Use 'many' instead of informal 'lots of' and remove redundant 'and' between adjectives 'beautiful' and 'natural' (adjective order and concision).

× It is Sundarbang, Cox Bazaar, Rangamati and also I like this place that's why I prefer my own country.

✓ For example, there are places like Sundarbans, Cox's Bazar, and Rangamati, and I like these places; that's why I prefer my own country.

Original sentence lacks clear structure and has place-name errors. Use 'For example' to introduce examples, correct proper names ('Sundarbans', 'Cox's Bazar'), use plural 'these places' to match multiple places, and connect clauses with appropriate punctuation. This fixes sentence structure and clarity.