Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Votre réponse est claire et naturelle mais contient des hésitations (« uh »), quelques erreurs mineures d'accord et de choix de mots, et est légèrement redondante. Travaillez à réduire les hésitations en pratiquant des phrases complètes et fluides; corrigez les accords (par exemple « landscape picture » → « landscape pictures ») et variez le vocabulaire pour éviter les répétitions. Donnez un ou deux détails concrets (lieu ou moment) pour rendre la réponse plus spécifique.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos. I often photograph landscapes when I travel, especially coastal scenes. For example, last summer I captured the sunset over a rocky beach, where the changing blues and reflections created a calm atmosphere.

提案: La réponse répond à la question mais comporte des erreurs de vocabulaire et d'accord (« using cities », « architectures », « building », « picture »). Améliorez la précision lexicale et la cohérence grammaticale; utilisez des mots corrects au pluriel/singulier et ajoutez un lien logique entre les idées (par exemple « therefore »). Donnez un exemple concret d'un lieu urbain et d'une scène photographique pour illustrer votre préférence.

例: I prefer urban views because of striking architecture and busy street scenes. For instance, in the city centre I often photograph tall buildings at golden hour, which create dramatic shadows and interesting contrasts with passing crowds.

提案: Bonne idée générale mais attention aux erreurs d'accord et de singulier/pluriel (« landscaped » devrait être « landscapes ») et au style un peu énumératif. Raccourcissez la phrase principale, utilisez des liaisons (par exemple « because » → « because, for example, ») et ajoutez un exemple précis d'un endroit ou d'une expérience pour rendre la réponse plus vivante.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I can easily visit diverse landscapes. For example, I can drive to nearby mountains for dramatic vistas in the morning, then spend an afternoon walking along a picturesque coastal vineyard.

× Whenever I go, uh, traveling, I always take landscape picture, especially uh, of the sea.

✓ Whenever I go traveling, I always take landscape pictures, especially of the sea.

The noun 'picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker refers to multiple photographs taken on trips. Use 'landscape pictures' for countable plural. Also remove the extra comma after 'go' and the hesitation markers for clarity. Suggestion: practice using plural forms when referring to more than one item.

× I love the different shades of blue, it gives a peaceful energy.

✓ I love the different shades of blue; they give a peaceful energy.

The subject 'the different shades of blue' is plural, so the clause should use 'they give' not 'it gives'. Also the comma splice is corrected to a semicolon (or use a period). Suggestion: ensure pronoun agrees in number with its antecedent and avoid comma splices.

× I prefer using cities because of their striking architectures.

✓ I prefer cities because of their striking architecture.

'Prefer using cities' is awkward; 'prefer cities' is natural. 'Architecture' is an uncountable noun here, so not pluralized. Suggestion: use 'architecture' without an -s when speaking generally about building design.

× You can find dramatic building that creates great shadows for pictures.

✓ You can find dramatic buildings that create great shadows for pictures.

'Building' should be plural 'buildings' to match 'you can find' and 'that create' plural verb. Also use plural verb 'create'. Suggestion: ensure noun and verb number agreement in relative clauses.

× Moreover, the lively urban life creates a perfect subject for great picture.

✓ Moreover, the lively urban life creates a perfect subject for great pictures.

'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because the speaker means photographs in general. Suggestion: when speaking about photography in general, use the plural form.

× I prefer views in my own country since I can enjoy dramatic mountain scenery, a beautiful coastline, and peaceful landscaped with a vineyard without traveling too far away.

✓ I prefer views in my own country since I can enjoy dramatic mountain scenery, a beautiful coastline, and peaceful landscapes with vineyards without traveling too far away.

'Landscaped' is incorrect; use the plural noun 'landscapes'. 'A vineyard' is singular and mismatches the parallel list; use plural 'vineyards' to indicate general examples. Suggestion: maintain parallel structure and correct noun forms in lists.