Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь отвечать прямо на вопрос и использовать точные слова. Избегайте лишних «э-э» и повторов. Дайте чёткое утверждение (yes/no) и поясните причину или пример в 1–2 предложениях, используя связки (because, so, for example). Также проверьте слова (views, waves) — используйте корректную лексику.

例: Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because they capture the atmosphere of a place. For example, I often photograph sunsets and mountain landscapes to remember peaceful moments.

提案: Улучшите произношение и словарный выбор (voice → views, 40s → fields/hills?). Дайте чёткую тему в первом предложении, затем добавьте 1–2 конкретных поддерживающих деталей и свяжите предложения словами (for example, while, however). Избегайте незавершённых фраз.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy open space and natural scenery. For example, rolling hills and green fields help me relax after a busy week, while city views can be interesting for architecture and nightlife.

提案: Отвечайте прямо и точно: начните с фразы, выражающей ваше мнение (Honestly, I prefer...). Избегайте словесного мусора («uh», «to be honestly») и ошибок в лексике (voice → views, heels → hills, video films → maybe 'scenery' or 'landscapes'). Дайте одно конкретное объяснение и пример, соединяя части речи союзом (because, for example).

例: Honestly, I prefer views in my own country because the familiar landscapes make me feel comfortable. For example, the rolling hills and coastal scenery near my home always help me relax after a busy week.

× Hello. Uh, my uh, no, I'm really taking pictures of different waves.

✓ Hello. Uh, no, I really like taking pictures of different views.

The student used incorrect pronouns and words: 'my' and 'waves' are wrong in context. Replace 'my' with nothing and 'waves' with 'views'. Also 'I'm really taking pictures' is awkward; 'I really like taking pictures' fits the question. Suggestion: remove unnecessary filler words and choose the correct noun and verb to express preference.

× I prefer voice in rural areas because I enjoy open space and natural scenery.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because I enjoy open space and natural scenery.

The student used 'voice' instead of 'views' (wrong lexical choice/pronoun-like error). Use the correct noun 'views'. The sentence structure is otherwise fine.

× For example, rolling hills and 40s help me relax after a busy week.

✓ For example, rolling hills and forests help me relax after a busy week.

'40s' is likely a mispronunciation or typo; it should be a noun like 'forests' or 'fields'. Replace with a proper noun 'forests' to make sense. Ensure the nouns are appropriate for scenery.

× In contrast urban ways voice can be interesting because of the skilling, but I find.

✓ In contrast, urban views can be interesting because of the skyline, but I prefer rural scenery.

Multiple errors: 'urban ways voice' is garbled; 'urban views' is correct. 'the skilling' is incorrect; 'the skyline' fits. The original ends with 'but I find' which is incomplete; complete the thought 'but I prefer rural scenery.' Fix sentence structure and missing words to convey contrast clearly.

× To be honestly, uh, my country prefer voice cause of uh, for example, rolling heels and video films Help me relax after a busy week.

✓ To be honest, I prefer my country because, for example, rolling hills and video films help me relax after a busy week.

Many errors: 'To be honestly' should be 'To be honest'. 'my country prefer' has subject-verb agreement and pronoun ordering issues; correct is 'I prefer my country'. 'voice' should be 'views'. 'heels' should be 'hills'. 'video films Help' has capitalization error; use 'video films help'. Overall fix pronouns, verb agreement, word choice, and capitalization to make a coherent sentence.