Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 句子不够简洁自然，有停顿词和重复（uh, umm, with my phone/mobile phone），观点表达明确但结构松散。建议去除语气词与重复，使用一到两句清晰表达主旨并用一两个具体细节支撑，例如说什么时候、为什么或用手机拍照的用途。练习时注意流利度与句子衔接。

例: Yes, I do. Since I bought a new phone, I’ve started taking more photos of beautiful scenes to keep the memories. For example, I often photograph sunsets and city skylines to look back on later.

提案: 回答反复且含停顿词，信息重复（多次强调“get a chance”与“urban every day”）。建议直接给出观点后用一至两句说明原因并用连接词（because, so）组织句子，避免重复。可加入具体对比或举例增强内容。

例: I prefer rural views because I live in a busy city and find the countryside peaceful and scenic. For example, I like photographing green fields and quiet villages because they feel very different from my daily urban life.

提案: 观点清楚且有实例，但表达有重复与语气词，且“Scenery attracts me most, attracts me more”不够自然。建议将理由和例子连贯地组织成两到三句，避免重复，并说明具体吸引你的地方（颜色、建筑、文化）。

例: I prefer views in other countries because they feel new and different to me. For instance, when I visited Thailand I was fascinated by its colorful temples and tropical beaches, which are very different from the landscapes at home.

× I uh, got more and more love to take beautiful sceneries with my phone, umm, with my mobile phone because I want to remain that memory in my mind.

✓ I uh, grew to love taking beautiful scenery with my phone because I want to keep that memory in my mind.

错误类型：动词 + -ing 形式和词语搭配不当。原句中使用“got more and more love to take”不符合英语习惯，应使用“grow to love”或“came to love”。此外“take beautiful sceneries”中的“scenery”通常作不可数名词，使用动名词短语“love taking scenery”或“love taking pictures of scenery”更自然；“remain that memory”搭配不当，应使用“keep that memory”。建议：使用固定搭配，如 “grow to love + V-ing”，scenery 作不可数名词或说 “pictures of scenery”，以及用 keep 表示保存记忆。

× I prefer rural areas. So uh, as long as I get a chance to go to a rural area or umm, get a chance to see such sceneries. I must take a lot of photos because I am, uh, I stay in urban every day, so uh, rural.

✓ I prefer rural areas. So, if I get a chance to go to a rural area or see such scenery, I must take a lot of photos because I live in the city every day.

错误类型：现在时态和句子结构问题。原句中有断句和时态混乱（“I am, uh, I stay in urban every day”），应使用一般现在时表达习惯性动作：“I live in the city every day”。“such sceneries”搭配不当，scenery 作不可数名词，改为“such scenery”。建议：用完整句子表达条件关系，用 if 引导条件句，保持一般现在时一致性，并用正确的名词形式（scenery, city）。

× If I have any chance to go out to another city or even country, uh, for example, I went to Thailand. It's beautiful. Scenery attracts me most, attracts me more.

✓ If I have a chance to go to another city or even another country — for example, when I went to Thailand — it was beautiful; the scenery attracted me the most.

错误类型：动词形式和时态混用、名词搭配。原句在条件句中使用现在时“have any chance”与随后突转为过去时“I went to Thailand”且句子碎片化。建议：若要举例过去经历，应把条件句与过去经历分开或用明确的时态转换：‘when I went to Thailand’。同时‘scenery attracts me most, attracts me more’重复且比较级使用不当，改为“the scenery attracted me the most”。

× It's beautiful. Scenery attracts me most, attracts me more.

✓ It was beautiful. The scenery attracted me the most.

错误类型：形容词/副词使用和比较级错误。原句中“It’s beautiful”与上下文（过去经历）时态不一致，应为“It was beautiful”。“attracts me most, attracts me more”重复且比较级表达不清，正确表达为“attracted me the most”（最高级）。建议：注意时态一致性并使用合适的比较级或最高级表达强调。