Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural, grammatically correct and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Correct common errors (e.g. plural/singular, verb forms, articles). Avoid redundancy and keep to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different scenes because each place has its own character. For example, when I’m in the mountains I often photograph the trees and small wild animals, which makes me feel excited. I take pictures to remember those moments and the mood of the place.

提案: Lead with a direct answer, then give one clear, specific reason and a brief example. Use correct vocabulary and grammar (e.g. "prefer rural areas", "mountains", "took pictures of wild animals"). Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to connect ideas.

例: I prefer rural areas because I enjoy natural scenery like mountains and beaches. For example, last month I went to a favorite mountain in Taiwan with friends and we took pictures of wild animals and the landscape, which was very relaxing.

提案: Answer directly (own country or other countries) and give a specific reason. Keep sentences simple and grammatically correct. Use linking words ("because", "for example") and avoid repetition. Provide one concrete example with correct past tense verbs.

例: I prefer views in my own country because it has many beautiful mountains. For example, last month I visited a mountain in northern Taiwan with friends; we had a picnic and took several photos, and I felt very relaxed.

× 'I like taking picture of different moods because I think each wheels have its special feature.'

✓ 'I like taking pictures of different scenes because I think each place has its special features.'

'picture' should be plural 'pictures' to match 'taking' (general activity) and countable noun; 'moods' is odd for views so 'scenes' is clearer; 'each wheels' is wrong: 'wheels' is plural and mismatches 'each' so use 'each place' (singular); 'have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'each place'; 'feature' should be plural 'features' to match idea of more than one characteristic. Suggestion: use plural nouns correctly and ensure subject-verb agreement by keeping subjects and verbs in the same number.'},{

× 'Just like when you in the mountain you have a lot of trees and a lot of small wild animals and this kind of thing will make me feel very exciting and interesting, so I will taking a picture to recall it.'

✓ 'Just like when you are in the mountains, you see many trees and small wild animals, and these things make me feel excited, so I take pictures to remember them.'

'you in the mountain' is missing verb 'are' (present tense); 'mountain' should be plural 'mountains' for generalization; 'a lot of' is informal but acceptable; 'this kind of thing will make me feel very exciting and interesting' has several issues: 'exciting' describes something that causes excitement, while the speaker feels 'excited'; 'interesting' is redundant; improved to 'these things make me feel excited'; 'I will taking a picture' mixes future modal with gerund; correct to simple present 'I take pictures' for habitual action; 'to recall it' should be 'to remember them' with correct pronoun number. Suggestion: use correct present tense forms for habitual actions and match pronouns in number.'},{

× 'I prefer views in rural areas because I realize sea and beach may feel very enjoyable.'

✓ 'I prefer rural views because the sea and the beach feel very enjoyable.'

'views in rural areas' can be simplified to 'rural views'; 'I realize' is awkward here—use simple statement 'the sea and the beach' and add definite article 'the' because speaking about known features; 'sea and beach' should include 'the' and both nouns are countable/definite. Suggestion: use articles appropriately and avoid unnecessary verbs like 'realize' when stating preference reasons.'},{

× 'So I usually go to mountain and do some picture.'

✓ 'So I usually go to the mountains and take some pictures.'

'go to mountain' needs article or plural 'the mountains'; 'do some picture' is ungrammatical—use 'take some pictures'. Suggestion: use correct verbs with photography (take pictures) and correct noun forms (mountains, the mountains).'},{

× 'For example, last month I went my favorite and I we went to Taiwan's mountain and we took some picture offside wild animals and sure together.'

✓ 'For example, last month I went to one of my favorite mountains in Taiwan with my friends, and we took some pictures of wild animals nearby and had a picnic together.'

'I went my favorite' is missing preposition and noun: should be 'went to one of my favorite mountains'; 'Taiwan's mountain' is better as 'mountains in Taiwan' or 'a mountain in Taiwan'; 'took some picture' should be plural 'pictures'; 'offside wild animals' is incorrect—use 'of wild animals nearby'; 'and sure together' is nonsense—likely 'had a picnic together'. Suggestion: use correct past tense structures with 'went to', pluralize 'pictures', and use clear prepositions like 'of' and 'nearby'.'},{

× 'I prefer bills in my country is because there are many mountains in my country and I'm very enjoying mountain scene.'

✓ 'I prefer hills in my country because there are many mountains in my country and I really enjoy mountain scenery.'

'bills' is a misspelling; should be 'hills'; sentence structure 'I prefer X in my country is because' is wrong—remove 'is'; 'I'm very enjoying' is incorrect—use 'I really enjoy' or 'I am very fond of'; 'mountain scene' should be 'mountain scenery' or 'mountain scenes'. Suggestion: correct spelling, remove extra 'is', and use proper verb forms (enjoy) and noun collocations.'},{

× 'For example, last month I went to one of my favorite mountain is in the north of Taiwan with my friends with two the picture in there and have some picnic we so I know I feel very relaxed.'

✓ 'For example, last month I went to one of my favorite mountains in the north of Taiwan with my friends; we took some pictures there and had a picnic, so I felt very relaxed.'

'went to one of my favorite mountain is' mixes structures—use 'went to one of my favorite mountains in the north of Taiwan'; 'with two the picture in there' is unclear—likely 'we took some pictures there'; 'have some picnic' should be past 'had a picnic'; 'we so I know I feel very relaxed' should be 'so I felt very relaxed' to keep past-tense consistency. Suggestion: keep verb tense consistent (past) for past events, use plural forms for countable nouns, and use clear clause connectors like 'so' properly.'}]}(Note: assistant included extra blank entries to separate suggestions)