Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: 1) Ngữ pháp và phát âm: sửa các lỗi như 'taking picture' -> 'taking pictures', 'different view' -> 'different views', và tránh lặp từ 'I think is I think is'. 2) Cấu trúc: mở đầu bằng câu chủ đề rõ ràng (Yes/No + reason), rồi thêm 1–2 chi tiết hỗ trợ. 3) Liên kết ý: dùng từ nối như 'because', 'so', 'for example' để mạch lạc. 4) Ngắn gọn: giữ tối đa 3-4 câu, không nói lặp. Cụ thể: luyện nói câu chủ đề, câu giải thích, và câu ví dụ.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views, especially landscapes, because photography helps me capture memorable moments. For example, I often take photos with my best friend when we travel, so I can remember those days. I also like experimenting with light and composition to make each photo more interesting.

提案: Cải thiện: 1) Loại bỏ lặp từ (ví dụ 'I prefer' và 'green fields' lặp). 2) Câu chủ đề rõ ràng: 'I prefer rural areas because...' 3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể hơn về cảm xúc hoặc hoạt động (ví dụ: walking, listening to birds). 4) Dùng từ nối 'because' và 'for example' để liên kết ý rõ ràng.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are peaceful and less crowded. For example, I enjoy walking by green fields and a small river in a quiet village, listening to the birds and feeling relaxed.

提案: Cải thiện: 1) Cấu trúc: trả lời trực tiếp rồi giải thích rõ (I prefer... because...). 2) Sửa nội dung không rõ: 'smile, small rival' có thể là 'smiles, small rivers' hoặc 'scenery and familiar places' — cần nói rõ. 3) Thêm chi tiết cụ thể (kỷ niệm, văn hóa, phong cảnh). 4) Tránh ngắt quãng, luyện phát âm và từ vựng đúng.

例: I prefer views in my own country because the scenery is familiar and comforting. For example, I love the small rivers and friendly smiles of local people, which remind me of home and make my trips more meaningful.

× I like taking picture of different view like landscape, uh, because I think is I think is my favorite and, and photography can help me, uh, capture memorable moments.

✓ I like taking pictures of different views like landscapes, because I think photography is my favorite and photography can help me capture memorable moments.

The student incorrectly used singular nouns where plural forms are required. 'picture' should be 'pictures' and 'view' should be 'views' because they refer to multiple items. 'landscape' should be plural as 'landscapes' when giving examples. Also the phrase 'I think is I think is my favorite' is ungrammatical; it should be 'I think photography is my favorite' to include the subject. Suggestion: use plural nouns when speaking about more than one item and ensure each clause has a clear subject and verb.

× I like staying picture with my best friend.

✓ I like staying in pictures with my best friend.

The sentence is missing the preposition and misuses 'picture' in singular. The intended meaning is to appear in photographs, so use 'in pictures' (plural) and include the preposition 'in'. Suggestion: say 'stay in pictures' or better 'appear in pictures' to convey being photographed with someone.

× I prefer I prefer views in rural areas because they are very peaceful and I like looking at the green fields, green fields and small river in a quiet village.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because they are very peaceful and I like looking at the green fields and the small river in a quiet village.

The student repeated 'I prefer' and 'green fields' unnecessarily and used singular 'small river' without an article. Remove the repetition and add the definite article 'the' before 'small river' to specify a particular river in the village. Suggestion: avoid repeating phrases and use articles correctly ('the small river').

× I prefer views in my own country because I like smile, small rival and.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because I like small villages and smiling faces.

This sentence contains unclear words: 'smile, small rival and' seems to be incorrect word choices and incomplete. Likely the student meant 'smiling faces' and 'small villages'. 'Rival' is incorrect; use 'village'. Also the original ends abruptly with 'and.' Suggestion: choose correct nouns and complete the list; e.g., 'small villages and friendly people' or 'small villages and smiling faces'.