Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and organized: start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details (how you take photos, what you enjoy photographing). Avoid repetition and filler words, and keep it under five sentences. Use linking words like “because” or “for example” to make your answer coherent.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography helps me notice details. For example, at university I took courses that taught me composition and lighting, and I now use my own camera to practice those techniques.

提案: Begin with a direct statement of preference, then give specific reasons and one brief example. Remove hesitations and avoid repeating words. Use linking words such as “because” and “for example” to improve coherence.

例: I prefer urban views because I love architecture and detailed street scenes. For example, my hometown Saint Petersburg has many historic buildings and vibrant streets that make interesting photo subjects.

提案: Clarify your meaning and correct unclear phrases. Start with a clear statement (prefer other countries), then give specific reasons and an example of what you want to try. Avoid vague expressions like “new experiments” without explaining them.

例: I prefer photographing views in other countries because new places inspire me and offer different cultures and landscapes. For instance, I would like to photograph markets and coastal scenes abroad to try new styles of street and landscape photography.

× Of course I like it.

✓ Of course I like it.

No change needed. Sentence correctly uses present simple to express a general preference.

× I like photographing a lot.

✓ I like taking photographs a lot.

Original is understandable but 'photographing' is less natural in this context. Use 'taking photographs' or 'photography' as a noun. Suggestion: use 'taking photographs' for conversational clarity.

× I I'm studying at university and I had a lot of courses and my teacher taught me taking photos and of course I have my own camera.

✓ I'm studying at university, and I have taken many courses where my teacher taught me how to take photos; of course I have my own camera.

Multiple issues: tense inconsistency ('had' should be present perfect 'have taken' to refer to courses experienced up to now), and incorrect verb pattern ('taught me taking photos' should be 'taught me how to take photos'). Also remove duplicated 'I'. Improve flow with punctuation. Use present perfect for past experiences related to present study.

× I think taking photo photos of a big cities is more interesting than taking photos in on in villages.

✓ I think taking photos of big cities is more interesting than taking photos in villages.

Problems: duplicate word 'photo photos', incorrect article use 'a big cities' (singular article with plural noun). Also extra prepositions 'in on in'. Correction: remove duplicate, use plural 'big cities' without 'a', and use single 'in villages'.

× I think I prefer city sides because I'm from Saint Petersburg.

✓ I think I prefer city areas because I'm from Saint Petersburg.

'City sides' is nonstandard; 'city areas' or 'urban areas' is appropriate. No verb agreement error in original but word choice was incorrect. Replace with natural collocation.

× There are lots of beautiful streets with, uh, interesting architecture.

✓ There are lots of beautiful streets with interesting architecture.

Remove filler 'uh' for written correctness. Present simple 'are' correctly describes a general state.

× Nowadays I feel that I'm tired of Saint Petersburg and that's why I prefer UH for taking photos of foraging countries.

✓ Nowadays I feel that I'm tired of Saint Petersburg, and that's why I prefer taking photos in foreign countries.

Problems: 'prefer UH' contains an unclear token 'UH' (likely filler) which should be removed; 'foraging' is incorrect word choice—use 'foreign' instead; preposition 'of' should be 'in' for photographing places. Keep present tense 'prefer' to describe current preference.

× I love new experiments.

✓ I love new experiences.

'Experiments' is incorrect meaning here; the intended word is 'experiences'. Use noun 'experiences' to express enjoying trying new things.