Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and fluent: start with a clear topic sentence, avoid fillers (uh, umm), correct grammar (singular/plural, word choice), and give one or two specific examples with brief reasons. Use linking words (for example, because) to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because photography feels like therapy to me. For example, I like capturing rivers at sunrise for the soft light, and mountain landscapes for their dramatic shapes.

提案: Give a direct answer, correct repetition and grammar, and include a specific reason and a short example. Use linking words (because, for instance) and avoid repeating words unnecessarily.

例: I prefer rural views because they offer peaceful natural scenery. For instance, in my village there is a large forest nearby, which I find relaxing and photogenic.

提案: Answer directly, improve grammar and clarity, and give a concise reason with a concrete example. Avoid unclear negatives and repetition. Use linking words like because and for example to make your point logical.

例: I prefer views in my own country because I know them well and appreciate their beauty. For example, Nepal has spectacular mountain scenery that I find more appealing than places I have visited, such as parts of India.

× Yes, I do like taking picture of different views because, uh, in my, in my words, it is like just like umm therapy to me.

✓ Yes, I do like taking pictures of different views because, in my words, it is like therapy to me.

Use plural 'pictures' after 'taking' because 'taking pictures' is the correct collocation (Singular and plural of countable noun). Also remove redundant fillers and duplicate words ('just like', extra commas) to make the sentence concise.

× And I love to take pictures of different views like sun rivers, although views and mountain, a hilly area, everything.

✓ And I love to take pictures of different views like sunsets, rivers, lakes, mountains, and hilly areas.

Some nouns were incorrect or misspelled ('sun' should be 'sunsets'; 'although views' unclear; 'mountain, a hilly area' inconsistent). Use plural forms for general categories and separate items with commas and 'and' at the end for correct list structure. This corrects word choice and parallel structure.

× Well, I prefer views in rural areas because in rural rural area there are many, many forest in my in my own, in my own village there is a big forest, although I live there, so I love to I love to prefer views in rural area.

✓ Well, I prefer views in rural areas because in my village there are many forests; in my own village there is a big forest, and I live there, so I prefer views in rural areas.

Use 'in' with 'my village' and plural 'forests' for countable nouns. Avoid repetition ('rural rural', 'in my in my') and incorrect article usage ('many forest' -> 'many forests'). Maintain consistent plural 'areas' and simplify redundancies.

× I do prefer views in my own country because till now I have not travelled in any any out country except India and I don't think so that India has more good or a nice view more than Nepal so I prefer to take.

✓ I prefer views in my own country because so far I have not traveled to any foreign country except India, and I don't think India has nicer views than Nepal, so I prefer my country.

Use present perfect 'have not traveled' correctly with 'so far' (avoid 'till now'). Use 'traveled to' and 'foreign country' instead of 'out country'. Correct comparative adjective order: 'nicer views than Nepal'. Remove redundant words and finish the sentence with a clear object ('my country').