Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: まず、話し始めの文は明確で良いですが、

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views because it helps me relax. For example, when I visited Hakone last year, I took many photos of the tranquil lake and the surrounding mountains, and I often review them to remember the calm atmosphere.

提案: 「nation」など語彙の誤用を避け、より具体的な表現や接続語を使って理由を補足してください。また、発音のための短い流暢さ訓練と語彙の正確さ（e.g. “nature”）の確認を推奨します。

例: I prefer rural views because the natural scenery, such as fields and forests, feels peaceful. For example, I like watching mist over rice paddies at sunrise, which helps me unwind after a busy week.

提案: 回答に誤った語彙（“bears”）が混ざっています。質問には「自国と外国どちらが好きか」を答える必要があり、理由を具体的に示すために具体例や比較を加えてください。また、不要な「uh」を減らして簡潔に述べる練習を行ってください。

例: I prefer views in my own country, Japan, because it offers a wide variety of landscapes. For example, you can see coastal cliffs, cherry blossom-covered parks, and volcanic mountains all within a few hours, which makes domestic travel very rewarding.

× I prefer views in rural areas because there is nation, there is nature, which makes me feel relaxed.

✓ I prefer views in rural areas because there is nature, which makes me feel relaxed.

The student used 'nation' incorrectly; the intended word is 'nature'. This is a word choice error rather than a grammatical inflection issue. Replace 'nation' with 'nature' to convey the meaning of natural scenery. Also, keep the sentence singular 'there is nature' is acceptable; alternatively you could say 'there are natural landscapes' if you want plural. Be careful with similar-sounding words and proofread for correct vocabulary.

× I like bears in my country, in Japan, uh, because, uh, there are many kinds of beautiful views in Japan.

✓ I like being in my country, Japan, because there are many kinds of beautiful views there.

The original sentence 'I like bears in my country' is likely a misstatement; context implies the speaker means they like being in their country or likes views in their country. This is a sentence structure and word-choice problem. The corrected version clarifies the subject and removes repetition. Use 'there' to avoid repeating 'in Japan'. Eliminate filler 'uh' and unnecessary commas. For improvement, plan your sentence before speaking and replace hesitations with pauses; practice common phrases like 'I like being in my country' or 'I prefer views in my country'.