Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and natural, but you can improve by adding one specific example or brief reason to make it more vivid and by keeping it within 2–3 sentences. Use a linking phrase to expand smoothly.

例: Yes, I love capturing different views because photographs help me remember special moments with my family. For example, I often take pictures of sunsets at the beach when we travel, so I can look back and remember that day.

提案: Your answer is confusing and contains contradictions and grammar errors. First, state your clear preference in one sentence. Then add 1–2 supporting reasons that are specific and coherent, using linking words (for example, 'because' or 'for instance'). Avoid long, run-on sentences and incorrect comparisons.

例: I prefer rural views because they feel more peaceful and natural. For instance, I enjoy photographing country roads and farm animals, and I often see people cycling and traditional houses, which make the scenes more interesting.

提案: Your main idea is understandable but repetitive and contains awkward phrasing. Give a concise topic sentence stating your preference, then support it with one specific reason and a brief contrast using a linking word like 'however' or 'while'. Correct common errors (e.g., 'abroad' not 'in abroad', 'moments' not 'movements').

例: I prefer taking pictures in my own country because I usually travel there with my family and feel more relaxed. However, I also take photos abroad with friends when I want to explore new places.

× I prefer to capture views of rural areas over urban areas as in urban areas environment is more cleaner and calm rather than cities as their people still follow the traditional ways like they ride bicycles rather than cars and there we can see more animals like cows.

✓ I prefer to capture views of rural areas rather than urban ones, because the urban environment is less clean and calm than rural areas; people there still follow traditional ways, such as riding bicycles instead of driving cars, and you can see more animals like cows in rural places.

Multiple issues: article usage ('the urban environment' needs 'the'); comparative structure ('more cleaner' is incorrect — use 'less clean' or 'cleaner'); incorrect conjunctions and run-on sentence leading to sentence structure errors. Suggestion: break into shorter clauses, use correct comparative forms, and choose consistent nouns ('urban ones' vs 'rural areas'). Grammar problem type IDs involved: 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions/articles), 13 (Incorrect use of adjectives), 26 (Sentence structure errors).

× I prefer both, but mostly in my own country, as there I visit different places with my families and capture the movements we spend together.

✓ I prefer both, but mostly my own country, because I visit different places there with my family and capture the moments we spend together.

Errors: 'my families' is incorrect when referring to one family — use singular 'my family'; 'capture the movements' is incorrect word choice — use 'moments'. Also 'as there I visit' is awkward; reorder to 'because I visit different places there'. Suggestion: use correct singular/plural noun forms and choose appropriate nouns (moments) for context. Grammar problem type IDs: 1 (Singular and plural issue), 12 (Incorrect use of pronouns).

× But in abroad I visit with my friends, but I feel more comfortable with my own family rather than friends.

✓ But abroad I visit with my friends; still, I feel more comfortable with my own family than with friends.

Errors: 'in abroad' is wrong preposition — use 'abroad' without 'in'; repetition of 'but' creates redundancy; comparative phrasing 'more comfortable with my own family than with friends' is preferable. Suggestion: remove unnecessary prepositions and improve sentence connectors to avoid repetition. Grammar problem type IDs: 11 (Incorrect use of prepositions), 20 (Incorrect adverb/conjunction placement).