Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and natural, but you can improve by adding a brief reason and a specific example to make it more engaging. Keep sentences concise (max 5) and use a linking word when adding detail.

例: Yes, I enjoy photographing landscapes and making short video clips. I often post them online so my family and friends can see what I’ve seen. For example, last month I filmed a sunset over the coast and shared it with my sister, who lives abroad, so she could enjoy the view too.

提案: Good direct answer, but try to combine sentences for coherence and provide a specific reason or example. Use linking words like 'however' or 'because' to connect ideas and avoid short choppy sentences.

例: It depends on my mood; however, I generally prefer city views because I like the energy and architecture. That said, I also enjoy rural scenery when I want to relax, for instance, a quiet lakeside walk calms me after a busy week.

提案: Clear and relevant answer. To improve, expand briefly with a specific reason or example and use a linking phrase to connect the preference to the benefit of new experiences.

例: I prefer views from other countries because they offer different cultures and landscapes that help me build new memories. For example, visiting Japan last year, I loved photographing the cherry blossoms, which was a completely different experience from sights at home.

× It depends with the day and the mood I have.

✓ It depends on the day and the mood I have.

Use the correct preposition 'on' after 'depends'. The phrase 'depends on' is the standard collocation in English. Suggestion: memorize common verb+preposition collocations (e.g., depend on, rely on) and practice using them in sentences.

× Rural scenery is also enjoyable and relaxing.

✓ Rural scenery is also enjoyable and relaxing.

No change necessary: 'scenery' is an uncountable noun and correctly used in singular form. This entry is included only to indicate that the sentence is already correct for number; continue to use 'scenery' without pluralization.

× I post and share with my family and friends online so that they can enjoy the view with me.

✓ I post and share them with my family and friends online so that they can enjoy the views with me.

The original sentence omits a direct object after 'post and share', which makes the sentence slightly unclear. Adding 'them' clarifies what is being posted/shared (pictures and clips). Also pluralizing 'view' to 'views' matches the earlier mention of different landscapes. Suggestion: include an object after transitive verbs (post, share) and keep number consistent with context.

× I prefer views from other countries because I get to enjoy and build new memories.

✓ I prefer views in other countries because I get to enjoy them and build new memories.

Use 'in other countries' to indicate location (views occurring in those countries). Also adding 'them' after 'enjoy' clarifies the object, and keeps parallel structure ('enjoy them and build new memories'). Suggestion: choose prepositions that indicate location ('in') and include objects for transitive verbs.