Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence that answers the question, then give one or two specific supporting details. Avoid unclear phrases and grammar errors. Use linking words (for example, and) correctly and keep answers to no more than five sentences. Focus on specific examples (where you went, what you photographed) and correct common mistakes (e.g. say “taking photos” not “tagging”).

例: Yes, I do. I enjoy taking photos of different views because I love travelling to scenic places. For example, when I visit the coast I take wide shots of the sea and close-ups of interesting rocks. My family and I also take group photos at viewpoints to remember the trips.

提案: Answer directly, then give clear reasons with correct vocabulary and linking words. Replace vague phrases with precise words (e.g. ‘rural areas’, ‘calm and quiet’) and avoid repetition. Keep sentences grammatically correct and shorter to improve clarity.

例: I prefer views in rural areas because they are usually calmer and less crowded. For instance, I enjoy photographing quiet fields and small villages where I can focus on natural details like wildflowers or old cottages. This peaceful atmosphere helps me relax and take better photos.

提案: Give a direct response (e.g. ‘It depends’), then explain clearly with one or two specific reasons and examples. Avoid filler words (‘um’, ‘and’) and fix grammar (e.g. ‘I think it depends on my mood’, ‘abroad’). Use linking words such as ‘however’ or ‘sometimes’ to contrast ideas.

例: It depends on my mood. Sometimes I prefer views in my own country because I know the best local spots and they feel familiar and peaceful. However, when I want new experiences I prefer views abroad, such as historic cityscapes in Europe, because they offer different architecture and culture.

× Yes, of course, I'm a big fan of tagging further in different views because I love to travel in many places that's beautiful place and also my family and I like to take a picture in different views, for example when go to the.

✓ Yes, of course. I'm a big fan of taking photos of different views because I love to travel to many beautiful places, and my family and I also like to take pictures of different scenes, for example when we go on trips.

The sentence has multiple sentence structure problems: incorrect verb choice ('tagging further' should be 'taking photos'), missing prepositions ('travel to many places'), run-on and missing subject in clause ('when go to the' -> 'when we go on trips'), and plural/verb agreement issues ('take a picture' -> 'take pictures'). Suggestion: split into shorter sentences, use correct verbs ('take photos'), include necessary prepositions ('to'), and ensure subjects are present in each clause. Grammar problem type ID:26

× Actually yes, I prefer about the wheel in rural areas because I love the beautiful places and calm and quiet more than the open area that a lot of cloud people that makes me feel comfortable more than a lot.

✓ Actually, yes. I prefer rural areas because I love beautiful, calm, and quiet places more than crowded urban areas; they make me feel more comfortable.

This sentence contains incorrect and missing prepositions and awkward phrases: 'prefer about the wheel' is meaningless and should be 'prefer rural areas'; 'open area that a lot of cloud people' seems to try to say 'crowded urban areas'. Also word order and repetition cause confusion. Suggestion: use correct nouns ('rural areas', 'crowded urban areas'), proper adjectives order, and simpler clause structure. Grammar problem type ID:11

× From my perspective, I thinks it depend on my umm mood because and sometimes I love to be in the place like quiet and calm.

✓ From my perspective, I think it depends on my mood because sometimes I like to be in quiet and calm places.

Errors: incorrect verb form 'thinks' should be 'think' for first person; 'depend' needs third person singular 'depends' to agree with singular subject ('it'); unnecessary filler 'umm' and conjunction 'and' remove. Suggestion: ensure subject-verb agreement and use appropriate verb forms ('I think', 'it depends'). Grammar problem type ID:2

× Sometimes I like them to stay in the abroad and.

✓ Sometimes I like to stay abroad.

The original has incorrect pronoun usage ('them') and article misuse ('the abroad') and is an incomplete sentence. 'Abroad' does not need 'the' and should be used without an object pronoun here. Suggestion: use 'I like to stay abroad' or 'I like to stay in other countries' and avoid dangling conjunctions or incomplete clauses. Grammar problem type ID:26