Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 回答要更直接和自然，注意时态与语法，减少冗余。先给出明确的主题句，然后用一两句具体细节支持（例如你拍照的目的、喜欢的景物类型或如何帮助你作画）。避免重复词和句子碎片。

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because I often use them as references for my paintings. For example, I photograph interesting lighting or unusual compositions that I later recreate on canvas.

提案: 回答需更自然且用词准确，避免填充词（umm, uh）和重复。先直接回答偏好，再用1–2句具体原因或例子支持，比如喜欢城市的建筑细节或夜景灯光。句子保持流畅，控制在最多五句内。

例: I prefer urban views because I find city architecture and street life more inspiring. For instance, I like photographing old buildings and bustling markets because they offer interesting shapes and vivid colors.

提案: 回答要更简洁且语法正确，避免词汇重复（e.g., "very is very"）。直接陈述偏好并给出具体原因或例子，如提到某个著名景点或独特自然景观，以及你拍摄时的感受。使用连词使句子更连贯。

例: I prefer views in my own country because China's landscapes, like its mountains and lush countryside, are incredibly diverse. For example, I enjoy photographing the dramatic peaks and green terraces because they create striking compositions and make me feel excited.

× Yes, I like it because I enjoy painting. If I will paint something or some pictures I will from the difficult view to describe it.

✓ Yes, I like it because I enjoy painting. If I paint something or some pictures, I will try to describe them from a difficult viewpoint.

本句主要问题是动词形式和句子结构。根据条件句习惯，表示真实或可能发生的情况应使用一般现在时而非“will”，因此“If I will paint”应改为“If I paint”。另外“from the difficult view to describe it”结构不自然，应该重组为“try to describe them from a difficult viewpoint”或“describe them from a difficult angle”。建议：在条件句中使用一般现在时；注意代词与先行词一致（pictures→them）；将不自然的短语改为标准名词短语（difficult viewpoint）。

× I perform views in urban areas because I enjoy the urban, umm, metropolitan, uh, city scraps.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy the urban, metropolitan cityscapes.

本句使用了不恰当的动词“perform”来表达偏好，应使用“prefer”。此外“city scraps”用词错误，应为“cityscapes”（城市景观）。多余的填充词（umm, uh）在书面或正式表达中应省略。建议：用正确的动词表达偏好（prefer）；使用恰当的名词（cityscapes）；去掉犹豫语。

× So I think they let let me feel the city is more splendid and umm.

✓ So I think they make me feel that the city is more splendid.

本句结构混乱：重复了“let let”，且“let me feel the city is more splendid”语序不自然，缺少连接词“that”。将动词改为“make”更自然：make me feel that... 。删除犹豫词“umm”。建议：避免重复词，使用合适的表达（make me feel that）；补足从句连词。

× I exactly prefer the views in our country because in China the mountains and the green is very is very rich and is very splendid and spectacular.

✓ I prefer the views in our country because in China the mountains and the greenery are very rich and very splendid and spectacular.

问题包括代词/指代与名词一致及主谓一致。第一句中“exactly prefer”用法不自然，可去掉“exactly”。“the green”应改为“the greenery”或“greenery”，且作主语时要用复数或不可数名词，谓语应与之保持一致，故“are”替代“is”。此外重复的“is very”需简化。建议：用自然搭配（prefer）；选择正确名词（greenery）；注意主谓一致（are）。

× So I love it. I think it let me feel exciting and surprise.

✓ So I love it. I think it makes me feel excited and surprised.

问题在于形容词/副词使用与动词形式。原句中“let me feel exciting and surprise”错误地将感觉的主体与情绪混淆。应使用“make/makes me feel + 形容词（excited, surprised）”。同时主语“it”第三人称单数，动词应为“makes”。建议：使用“make/make someone feel + 形容词”结构，注意形容词选择（excited, surprised）和主谓一致。