Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is short and contains grammatical errors and unclear phrasing. Make a clear topic sentence, correct grammar, and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Keep it under five sentences. For example, say you enjoy photography, describe what you photograph and why, and give a brief example of a favorite shot.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views. For example, I often photograph mountains and rivers because I like capturing natural light and wide landscapes. Also, I sometimes shoot urban scenes like busy streets to show contrast with nature.

提案: This answer is confusing and contains repetition and unintelligible words. Start with a clear opinion, give one or two specific reasons with linking words, and avoid repetition. Mention specific features of urban views (e.g., architecture, lights) to make the response concrete.

例: I prefer views in urban areas because I enjoy architecture and city lights. For instance, the variety of buildings and illuminated streets at night create interesting compositions for my photos.

提案: Your response is partly okay but has inaccuracies (Time Square is not in China) and is incomplete. Give a clear direct answer, include accurate and specific examples from your country, and use a linking word to add one reason or detail. Keep it concise and avoid listing unrelated places.

例: I prefer views in my own country, China, because I feel a strong connection to its landscapes. For example, I love photographing the Yangtze River and the karst mountains in Guilin, which have unique shapes and atmospheric mist that look great in photos.

× Yes, I like I often take picture of mountains, river or Motor City.

✓ Yes, I often take pictures of mountains, rivers, or the Motor City.

The sentence has several issues: an unnecessary repeated 'I', incorrect noun forms, and a missing article. 'Like' followed by another 'I' is redundant (sentence structure error) but fits present participle context as the main issue is verb phrasing and nouns. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' because multiple subjects are listed. 'River' should be plural 'rivers' to match 'mountains' or use 'the river' for a specific one. 'Motor City' as a specific place needs the definite article 'the' if that is the common name; keep capitalization. Suggestion: remove the extra 'I', use 'often' before the verb, pluralize countable nouns when listing multiple types, and add articles as needed.

× I prefer view in urban areas because of the the urban areas. Hats NGT strip an educational details.

✓ I prefer views in urban areas because of the urban environment. It has more cultural and educational opportunities.

Several errors: 'view' should be plural 'views' when speaking generally about a category (quantifier/noun number). The phrase 'because of the the urban areas' repeats 'the' and is unclear; replace with 'because of the urban environment' to express reason. The following sentence 'Hats NGT strip an educational details' is unintelligible; likely intended meaning is that urban areas 'have more cultural and educational details/opportunities.' Use 'has' or 'have' correctly with subject; here 'urban areas' (plural) take 'have', but rephrasing to 'It has more...' treats 'the urban environment' (singular) and takes 'has'. Suggestion: choose clear nouns and match singular/plural forms and quantifiers, avoid repetition of articles.

× Yes, I prefer the views of my country. My country is China. There are lots of beautiful views such as Time Square, the Yangtze River and.

✓ Yes, I prefer the views of my country. My country is China. There are lots of beautiful places, such as Times Square and the Yangtze River.

The final list is incomplete and has errors: 'Time Square' should be 'Times Square' (proper name), and the sentence ends with 'and' with no following item. 'There are lots of beautiful views' is acceptable, but 'places' is more natural when listing landmarks. Ensure the 'there are' construction is followed by complete items. Suggestion: complete the list or remove the trailing 'and', correct proper nouns, and use parallel items when listing landmarks.