Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa dan pelafalan serta buat jawaban lebih langsung dan ringkas. Hindari pengulangan dan kata-kata tidak perlu (mis. "uh"). Gunakan kalimat topik yang jelas, lalu tambahkan satu atau dua detail pendukung dengan kata penghubung seperti "because" atau "so". Contoh fokus: alasan spesifik mengapa suka memotret dan bagaimana foto digunakan.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking pictures of different views because they show new perspectives and moods. For example, I often photograph city skylines at sunset to capture the lighting, and I choose the best shots to share on social media.

提案: Perbaiki struktur kalimat dan kosakata (mis. "crowed" → "crowded"). Jawab langsung lalu berikan alasan spesifik menggunakan penghubung seperti "because" atau "because of". Hindari pengulangan frasa yang sama; gunakan variasi kata (e.g., "scenery", "landscapes", "open spaces").

例: I prefer rural areas because they offer varied landscapes and open spaces, which are more peaceful and photogenic. For instance, I like photographing rolling hills and fields in the early morning when the light is soft.

提案: Perbaiki kejelasan dan gunakaan struktur yang logis: jawab langsung lalu jelaskan sebabnya. Hindari frasa kacau seperti "a lot of many" dan gunakan kata yang tepat (mis. "many beautiful landscapes"). Sebutkan contoh konkret yang ingin dilihat di negara lain jika ingin menambah detail.

例: I haven’t traveled abroad yet, so I enjoy photographing landscapes in my own country for now because it has many beautiful scenes. However, I would like to photograph coastal cliffs and historic streets in other countries in the future to see different cultures and scenery.

× Sure, I'd like to taking picture for different views because it would give you another pint of you another angle.

✓ Sure, I'd like to take pictures of different views because it would give you another perspective or another angle.

Incorrect use of verb + -ing after 'would like'. After 'would like' use the base verb (infinitive without 'to' or 'to' + verb); also 'taking' should be 'to take' or 'take' in this structure. 'Picture' should be plural 'pictures' and 'of' is the correct preposition. 'Pint' is a misspelling of 'point' or better 'perspective'. Suggestion: use 'I'd like to take pictures of different views because it would give you another perspective or another angle.'

× So, uh, we can choose which one of picture that we'd like to share or we are going to post on social media.

✓ So, uh, we can choose which pictures we'd like to share or post on social media.

Incorrect article and noun number: 'one of picture' is ungrammatical. Use plural 'pictures' and omit unnecessary 'that' or use 'that we want to share'. Also 'we are going to post' can be simplified to 'post'. Suggestion: 'we can choose which pictures we'd like to share or post on social media.'

× I love to take pictures in a rural area because they have more scenery and more landscape.

✓ I love to take pictures in rural areas because they have more scenery and more landscape.

Mismatch between singular 'a rural area' and plural pronoun 'they'. Either keep singular consistently ('a rural area because it has more scenery and landscape') or pluralize both. Also 'landscape' is uncountable here, no need for 'more' twice. Suggestion: 'I love to take pictures in rural areas because they have more scenery.'

× Area not as crowed as urban so I'd love.

✓ Areas are not as crowded as urban areas, so I'd love to.

Missing verb and misspelled 'crowed' should be 'crowded'. 'Area' should be plural 'areas' to match context, and include 'are' for a complete sentence. Also clarify 'urban' to 'urban areas'. Suggestion: 'Areas are not as crowded as urban areas, so I'd love to.'

× I would love to take a picture from a rural area.

✓ I would love to take a picture in a rural area.

Preposition error combined with verb usage: use 'in a rural area' rather than 'from a rural area' when describing taking a picture at that location. The verb phrase 'would love to take' is correct. Suggestion: 'I would love to take a picture in a rural area.'

× Actually, I have never been to another country before, so I'd love to check another picture from another country.

✓ Actually, I have never been to another country before, so I'd love to see pictures from other countries.

'Check another picture from another country' is awkward. Use 'see pictures from other countries'. Also keep tense consistent: present perfect 'have never been' followed by present conditional 'I'd love to'. Suggestion: 'I'd love to see pictures from other countries.'

× But for now I love to take a picture in my country too, because a lot of landscape pictures and there's a lot of many.

✓ But for now I love to take pictures in my country too, because there are many landscapes and photo opportunities.

Pronoun and noun phrase errors: 'a lot of landscape pictures and there's a lot of many' is ungrammatical and redundant. Use 'there are many landscapes' or 'there are many scenic places'. Also pluralize 'pictures' to match context. Suggestion: 'there are many landscapes and photo opportunities.'