Views— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cevap daha açık ve doğru dilbilgisiyle verilmelidir. Kısa ve net bir konu cümlesi kullanın, sonra nedenini ekleyin. Gereksiz tekrarları ve dolgu kelimelerini azaltın. Örneğin “videos” yerine “views” kullanılmalı; ayrıca ‘I just making’ ifadesi hatalıdır, ‘I just enjoy taking them’ gibi doğru bir ifade tercih edin. Yanıt 2–3 cümleyle sınırlı olmalı.

例: Yes, I enjoy taking photos of different views. I don’t aim for perfection because I’m not a professional; I take pictures to capture memories and enjoy the scenery.

提案: Cümlelerin zaman uyumunu ve kelime seçimlerini düzeltin. Kısa, doğrudan bir tercih cümlesi verin; ardından nedeni açıklayın ve bağlaç kullanın. Fazla dolgu sözcüklerini (‘uh’, ‘umm’) çıkarın. Örneğin ‘I like rural areas because I live there and can easily find peaceful scenes’ gibi net ifade kullanın.

例: I prefer rural areas because I live in the countryside and there are many peaceful landscapes to photograph. However, I sometimes go to cities for more dynamic and varied photo opportunities.

提案: Cümleyi mantıklı ve tam bir şekilde kurun; anlamsız veya eksik cümleleri düzeltin. Net bir tercih belirtin, nedenini spesifik örneklerle destekleyin ve mümkünse bir karşılaştırma yapın. Örneğin ‘my own country’ demenizin sebebini manzara türleri veya kültürel bağlamla açıklayın.

例: I prefer the views in my own country because the natural landscapes and cultural scenery are familiar and meaningful to me. In contrast, views abroad can be interesting, but I feel more connected to places at home.

× Yes, I really like taking pictures of different videos.

✓ Yes, I really like taking pictures of different views.

The word 'videos' is incorrect here; 'views' is the intended noun. This is a vocabulary/word-choice error affecting meaning. Use the noun that matches the context: 'views' (scenery) rather than 'videos' (recordings). Improve by reviewing common collocations: 'take pictures of views/scenery.'

× Uh, but uh, it's not have to be perfect because I'm not a professional photographer.

✓ But it does not have to be perfect because I'm not a professional photographer.

The original sentence uses an incorrect verb construction 'it's not have to be.' The correct structure for necessity negation uses 'does not have to' with a dummy subject omitted: 'it does not have to be.' Use correct auxiliary 'does' for present simple negation. Practice forming 'have to' in negative: 'doesn't have to' or 'does not have to.'

× I just making.

✓ I'm just making them./I just take pictures casually.

'I just making' lacks the auxiliary verb 'am' required for the present continuous: 'I am just making.' Also the verb 'make' needs an object; better to say 'I'm just taking pictures' or 'I'm just making snapshots.' Use correct auxiliary + -ing form and include the object when needed.

× I liked being in rural areas but uh, I'm living in umm rural rural areas so I don't have to too much chance to take pictures in urban area.

✓ I like being in rural areas, but I live in a rural area, so I don't have many opportunities to take pictures in urban areas.

'I liked' implies past; context requires present preference 'I like.' 'I'm living' is awkward for a permanent situation; simple present 'I live' is appropriate. 'I don't have to too much chance' is ungrammatical: 'don't have many opportunities' is correct quantifier and noun choice. Use plural 'urban areas.' Fix tense consistency and quantifier usage.

× I prefer my own country's views because we have really good views and before I see. Did my country's views. I don't wanna.

✓ I prefer the views of my own country because we have really beautiful scenery, and I have seen many of my country's views before, so I don't want to (visit other countries for views).

The original contains fragmented sentences and incorrect pronoun/reference and verb tense. 'My own country's views' is acceptable but smoother as 'the views of my own country.' 'Before I see. Did my country's views.' are fragments; use present perfect 'I have seen' for experience up to now. 'I don't wanna' is informal; use 'I don't want to.' Repair sentence fragments, use correct tense for past experiences (present perfect) and standard pronoun/reference forms.