Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is slightly long and could be more concise. Reduce redundancy (e.g., "convenient and comfortable") and add a linking phrase to connect reasons. Also vary vocabulary (use "staying in touch" instead of "keep in touch throughout the day").

例: I do. I enjoy chatting with my friends because messaging is more convenient for staying in touch during a busy day. For example, I often send quick updates or funny photos to my closest friends to share moments without arranging a meet-up.

提案: Your idea is good but the answer is disfluent and contains hesitations and grammar mistakes. Start with a clear topic sentence, avoid filler words (uh), and use linking words to add specifics (for example, "about personal problems, future plans, or hobbies"). Correct grammar: "it really helps me communicate" or "helps me to communicate".

例: I usually talk to my friends about personal matters and ask for advice. For example, we discuss relationship issues, study plans, or career choices, which helps me feel supported and makes it easier to open up online.

提案: The response expresses preference but has many hesitations and informal speech. Remove filler words, correct phrasing ("discuss one story" → "discuss a topic or event"), and add a reason with an example. Keep to 2–4 sentences and use linking words like "because" or "for example."

例: I prefer chatting in a group because it is more engaging and produces different viewpoints. For example, when my friends discuss a recent event, everyone adds their opinion, which makes the conversation livelier and more informative.

提案: Your main point is understandable but grammar and coherence are weak with many hesitations. State the preference clearly, explain reasons with correct grammar ("As an introvert, I find social media helps me express my ideas more comfortably"), and give a brief example. Avoid vague phrases like "hide my emo real emotional."

例: I prefer communicating via social media because, as an introvert, I feel more comfortable expressing my ideas in writing. For instance, I can take time to compose my thoughts before replying, which reduces anxiety in conversations.

提案: The answer is relevant and coherent, but the opening sentence contradicts ("sometimes agree" vs arguing). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., "disagree" or "argue") and provide a short example of such a discussion. Keep sentences concise and use linking words like "however" and "for example."

例: I sometimes argue with my friends because we have different perspectives on problems, which leads to different solutions. For example, during a group project we disagreed on the approach, but discussing each idea helped us choose a better plan.

× I find messaging more convenient and comfortable than meeting face to face because we can't keep in touch throughout the day, and I often use it to share quick updates or funny photos with my best friends.

✓ I find messaging more convenient and comfortable than meeting face to face because we can't keep in touch throughout the day, and I often use it to share quick updates or funny photos with my best friends.

No change needed; sentence is grammatically correct and uses present tense appropriately.

× I often chat with my friends for deep talk or something uh for I ask them for advice so I think it's really helps me in communicate with them throughout a screen which is more comfortable for me.

✓ I often have deep conversations with my friends or ask them for advice, so I think it really helps me communicate with them through a screen, which is more comfortable for me.

Problems: awkward phrasing and extra filler words create sentence structure errors. 'for deep talk or something uh for I ask them for advice' is ungrammatical. 'it's really helps me in communicate' mixes auxiliary and base form. Corrections: replace 'chat ... for deep talk' with 'have deep conversations', remove fillers, use 'ask them for advice' as a parallel phrase, change 'it's really helps me in communicate' to 'it really helps me communicate' (help + base verb), and use 'through a screen' instead of 'throughout a screen'. These changes yield clearer, grammatical English.

× I would prefer to chat with a group of people rather than, uh, chat with only one friend 'cause I find it really interesting and engaging to umm have to participate in a group with a lot of people and discuss about one story that umm umm umm happening around us.

✓ I would prefer to chat with a group of people rather than with only one friend because I find it really interesting and engaging to participate in a group and discuss a story that is happening around us.

Problems: unnecessary fillers and incorrect verb forms. 'have to participate' is awkward — use 'to participate'. 'discuss about' is incorrect; 'discuss' does not take 'about', so use 'discuss a story' or 'talk about a story'. Missing verb 'is' before 'happening' required: use 'that is happening'. Remove fillers and extra preposition after 'rather than' by adding 'with'. These changes correct gerund/infinitive use and verb phrases.

× I prefer to communicate uh through social media. For me as a an introvert person is really helped me in like hiding my emo real emotional and express my idea umm more consistency because I just umm typing without.

✓ I prefer to communicate through social media. As an introvert, it really helps me hide my emotions and express my ideas more consistently because I can just type.

Problems: incorrect pronoun/reference and ungrammatical clause structures. 'For me as a an introvert person is really helped me' is ungrammatical; use 'As an introvert, it really helps me...' 'hide my emo real emotional' is incorrect word choice and order; use 'hide my emotions'. 'express my idea umm more consistency' should be 'express my ideas more consistently' (plural and adverb). 'because I just umm typing without' lacks auxiliary and object — correct to 'because I can just type.' These changes fix pronoun/subject reference, plurality, and verb form.

× I sometimes agree with my friends because we often have different perspective on problems, so we come up with different solutions.

✓ I sometimes disagree with my friends because we often have different perspectives on problems, so we come up with different solutions.

Original likely intended meaning is 'argue' so student meant 'disagree' not 'agree'. Also 'different perspective' should be plural 'different perspectives' to match plural subject 'we'. This is a lexical correction (word choice) and pluralization; correcting to 'disagree' fits context and present tense. If meaning were 'agree', the sentence would be grammatical but contradicts following clause; here 'disagree' makes sense.

× However, I find these discussions interesting because they let me hear other opinions and sometimes change my own view.

✓ However, I find these discussions interesting because they let me hear other opinions and sometimes cause me to change my own view.

Sentence is mostly correct, but 'sometimes change my own view' is acceptable. Suggested correction adds explicit causation 'cause me to change' for clarity, though not strictly required. Present tense usage is appropriate.