Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: حاول أن تكون إجاباتك أكثر تنظيماً وخالية من التكرار، وركّز على استخدام جمل قصيرة وواضحة. ابدأ بجملة موضوعية تُجيب مباشرة ثم أضف تفاصيل داعمة قصيرة مع ربط منطقي بين الجمل. انتبه للنطق والقواعد البسيطة مثل استخدام الزمن الصحيح وصيغة الملكية (e.g. people I already know).

例: I don't chat much with friends. I feel shy starting conversations because I had no close friends at school. I prefer small groups and face-to-face talks with people I already know, rather than chatting online.

提案: اجعل إجابتك مباشرة ومحددة: اذكر الموضوع الرئيسي ثم أعطِ مثالاً واحداً أو سبباً يدعم إجابتك. تجنّب الإطالة بكلمات فاصلة مثل “umm” وعبارات غير مكتملة. استخدم تراكيب بسيطة وصحيحة نحويًا.

例: Mostly we talk about school life, such as homework and classes. Sometimes we also plan to hang out at the weekend, but overall I don't chat with them frequently.

提案: أحسنت ببدء إجابة مباشرة وتقديم أمثلة، لكن تحتاج لتحسين القواعد وترابط الجمل واختيار كلمات أدق (مثل opinions، group calls). حاول تقليل الأخطاء في الزمن وصياغة الجمع.

例: I prefer chatting in a group because I enjoy hearing different opinions and personal stories. For example, at parties or on group calls I learn new things and it is usually easier to join the conversation.

提案: ركز على الوضوح والدقة في التعبير، ولا تكرر نفس الفكرة مرتين. صغ جملة موضوعية واضحة ثم اشرح السبب باستخدام مفردات مناسبة (facial expressions, body language, honest). تأكد من ترتيب الكلمات بشكل صحيح.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can see facial expressions and body language, which help me understand feelings. Online it is harder to judge if someone is honest.

提案: اجب مباشرة ثم أعطِ سببًا أو مثالًا واضحًا. تجنب التردد والعبارات غير المنظمة. حاول أن تشرح بإيجاز متى ولماذا تحدث المشادات إن حدثت، مع أمثلة بسيطة.

例: We rarely argue. When we do, it is usually about small things like plans or misunderstandings, not about trust or serious issues.

× Well that that is a good question.

✓ Well, that is a good question.

The sentence contains a repeated word 'that' which is a structural error creating redundancy. Remove the duplicate 'that' to make the sentence clear and concise. Suggestion: Read aloud to catch repeated words and remove duplicates.

× I don't really chat much with friends.

✓ I don't really chat much with my friends.

The sentence is understandable but omits a common determiner 'my' which is needed to specify possession in this context. Add 'my' to match natural present-tense usage. Suggestion: Use 'my' when referring to your own friends.

× When I was in elementary school I had no close friends so I still feel shy starting confrontation.

✓ When I was in elementary school I had no close friends, so I still feel shy about starting a conversation.

Original mixes past ('was', 'had') with present feeling 'feel' which is acceptable but phrase 'starting confrontation' is incorrect: 'confrontation' implies conflict. The correct phrase is 'starting a conversation.' Also add 'about' after 'shy' and a comma before 'so'. Suggestion: Use 'about starting a conversation' for talking initiation; avoid 'confrontation' when you mean chatting.

× For example I usually prefer small groups who talking to people I already knows and I don't prefer to talk in chat, I prefer in reality.

✓ For example, I usually prefer small groups and talking to people I already know, and I don't prefer to chat online; I prefer face-to-face conversation.

Multiple errors: 'who talking' is wrong — use 'and talking' or restructure; 'knows' is wrong because subject is 'people I' with verb 'know' (present simple without 's'); 'talk in chat' is unnatural — use 'chat online'; 'prefer in reality' is awkward — use 'face-to-face conversation'. Also add commas for clarity. Suggestion: Use correct verb forms after relative pronouns and prefer natural collocations like 'chat online' and 'face-to-face'.

× I usually talk about school with my friends because they're from school.

✓ I usually talk about school with my friends because we go to the same school.

'They're from school' is vague and slightly ungrammatical in this context. 'We go to the same school' is clearer and more natural. Suggestion: Use precise phrases to explain relationships, e.g., 'we go to the same school'.

× My school, umm, maybe.

✓ Maybe about my school.

Fragmentary answer: 'My school, umm, maybe.' is not a complete sentence. Rephrase to 'Maybe about my school.' to provide a concise, complete response. Suggestion: Avoid fragments; give short complete phrases when hesitating.

× I talk about hanging out sometimes.

✓ I sometimes talk about hanging out.

Word order is slightly awkward; placing 'sometimes' before the verb makes the sentence flow more naturally. Suggestion: Use natural adverb placement: 'sometimes' before the main verb.

× That's it. I'm not, I inter. I don't talk to them much.

✓ That's it. I'm not really interested. I don't talk to them much.

'I'm not, I inter.' seems to be a mispronunciation or fragment; correct phrase is 'I'm not really interested.' This completes the thought and explains low interaction. Suggestion: Use full phrase 'interested' rather than fragments.

× I prefer chatting with the group because I don't like being the only person who talk in the group.

✓ I prefer chatting with a group because I don't like being the only person who talks in the group.

Use 'a group' not 'the group' for general preference. Also subject-verb agreement: 'who talk' should be 'who talks' because the relative clause refers to 'the only person' (singular). Suggestion: Use 'a group' for general statements and match verb to singular subject.

× in Group conversation I enjoy hearing different opinion and personal stories, so I often learn new things.

✓ In group conversations I enjoy hearing different opinions and personal stories, so I often learn new things.

Capitalization: 'in' should be 'In'; 'Group' should be lowercase. 'Conversation' should be plural 'conversations' to match general statement. 'Different opinion' needs plural 'opinions'. Suggestion: Use plural nouns when speaking generally and correct capitalization.

× For example at parties or on a group calls the discussion reliable and it's easier to join it.

✓ For example, at parties or on group calls, the discussion is livelier and it's easier to join in.

Several issues: add commas for clarity; 'on a group calls' mixes singular article with plural noun — use 'on group calls'; 'reliable' is likely intended to be 'livelier' (more dynamic), and 'join it' should be 'join in'. Suggestion: Match articles and number, choose correct adjective ('livelier') and use 'join in' for participating.

× I prefer face to face conversation because I can't see people.

✓ I prefer face-to-face conversation because I can see people.

Original contradicts itself: 'prefer face to face because I can't see people' is wrong. Likely intended 'because I can see people' since face-to-face allows visual cues. Also hyphenate 'face-to-face'. Suggestion: Ensure logical consistency and correct collocation 'face-to-face'.

× I can't see people facial experience and body language which helps me understand their feelings.

✓ I can see people's facial expressions and body language, which helps me understand their feelings.

'Facial experience' is incorrect; correct term is 'facial expressions'. Also possessive 'people's' and comma before relative clause improve grammar. Suggestion: Use correct collocations like 'facial expressions' and add possessive where appropriate.

× It's harder to tell if someone is honest with when I'm com communicate on social media and it's better.

✓ It's harder to tell if someone is honest when I'm communicating on social media, so in-person is better.

Original has extra words 'with' and typo 'com communicate'. Remove 'with', use 'communicating', and connect clauses logically: 'so in-person is better.' Suggestion: Proofread for extra words and typos; use gerund 'communicating' after 'when I'm'.

× Well obviously all friends argued about something, but me and my friends, like it's rarely you see us argue about something.

✓ Well, obviously friends argue about things, but my friends and I rarely argue about anything.

Errors: tense/form 'all friends argued' should be general present 'friends argue'; pronoun order 'me and my friends' should be 'my friends and I'; 'it's rarely you see us argue' is unnatural — use 'rarely argue about anything.' Suggestion: Use subject pronouns correctly and general present tense for habitual facts.

× I don't know why, but it's not about love or trust, it's about something I actually don't know.

✓ I don't know why; it's not about love or trust — it's about something I actually don't know.

Sentence is long and slightly awkward; punctuation adjustments improve clarity. Prepositions are okay but punctuation and repetitive 'don't know' can be smoothed. Replacing comma with semicolon and dash clarifies contrast. Suggestion: Use punctuation to separate ideas and avoid needless repetition.