Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Tone and enthusiasm are good, but the answer is slightly long and contains redundant phrases. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two concise supporting details. Avoid exaggerated or unclear phrases like "even saying like is an understatement." Use simpler, natural expressions and keep to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I really enjoy chatting with friends. I find conversations exciting because they lift my mood and help me stay connected, especially when we share funny stories or give each other advice.

提案: The content is relevant and varied, but phrasing can be clearer and more specific. Use linking words to order your points (for example, "sometimes... other times...") and give one concrete example to illustrate each type of topic. Keep sentences concise and avoid repetition like "it's even discussing drama."

例: We talk about many things. Sometimes we have deep conversations about personal problems when someone needs support; other times we laugh about funny memories, such as a trip that went wrong, or gossip about the latest celebrity news.

提案: Good idea and personal opinion, but phrasing is slightly awkward and wordy. Begin with a direct answer (e.g., "I prefer one-on-one conversations") and then briefly explain why with a clear reason and example. Avoid labels like "popular loner" unless you explain them, and limit to 2–3 sentences.

例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because a single conversation feels more meaningful. For example, when I talk privately with a close friend, we can discuss personal issues more deeply than in a group setting.

提案: Clear preference is stated, but language includes informal filler and negative phrasing that could sound blunt. Start with a direct answer, give one reason with a concrete example, and avoid fillers like "uh." Use neutral language (e.g., "less personal" instead of "robotic").

例: I prefer face-to-face conversations because they feel more personal and I can read body language. For instance, when I discuss important matters in person I can better understand my friend's emotions, which is harder over social media.

提案: The response is vague and hesitant. Give a direct answer about frequency or attitude toward arguments, then explain briefly how you handle disagreements. Avoid hesitations like "I don't know" and unclear negatives. Provide a specific example of a recent disagreement and resolution if possible.

例: Yes, disagreements happen occasionally, but we don't argue with bad intent. For example, when a friend and I recently disagreed about plans, we calmly discussed our priorities and reached a compromise.

× Talking to people brings me this thrill and joy and I prefer it over any interaction.

✓ Talking to people brings me thrill and joy, and I prefer it to any other interaction.

Use of prepositions: 'prefer ... to' is the correct collocation, not 'prefer ... over' in this context. Also 'this thrill' is unnatural; drop 'this' or use 'a thrill'. Added 'other' to clarify comparison and added a comma for readability.

× Sometimes it would be deep when it's needed to have a comforting friend, and sometimes it's funny stories reflecting on our memories together, or it's even discussing drama.

✓ Sometimes it can be deep when a comforting friend is needed, sometimes it is funny stories reflecting on our memories together, or sometimes it is even discussing drama.

Incorrect verb forms and sentence structure: 'would be deep' and 'it's needed to have' are awkward. Use 'can be deep' for habitual possibility and convert 'it's needed to have a comforting friend' to passive 'a comforting friend is needed'. Maintain parallel structure by using consistent sentence patterns.

× I would actually consider myself what we call nowadays, popular loner.

✓ I would actually consider myself what we nowadays call a 'popular loner'.

Pronoun/word order and article: The phrase 'what we call nowadays' should be 'what we nowadays call' or 'what we call nowadays, a'. Also 'popular loner' needs an article 'a' because it is a noun phrase. Quotation marks indicate the label.

× As much as I enjoy talking to a variety of people, I think having one directed conversation with one person is far more valuable and profound than talking to multiple.

✓ As much as I enjoy talking to a variety of people, I think having a focused conversation with one person is far more valuable and profound than talking to multiple people.

Pronoun omission: 'multiple' is incomplete without the noun 'people'. Also 'one directed conversation' is awkward; 'a focused conversation' is clearer. Ensure parallelism and include the noun after 'multiple'.

× Without doubt, I prefer having face to face conversations.

✓ Without a doubt, I prefer having face-to-face conversations.

Preposition/article and hyphenation: Include the article 'a' in 'without a doubt' and hyphenate 'face-to-face' when used adjectivally. This corrects idiom and punctuation.

× Talking to someone via social media platforms is very robotic and stirs up unreal feelings.

✓ Talking to someone via social media platforms feels very robotic and stirs up artificial feelings.

Word choice: 'is very robotic' is acceptable but 'feels very robotic' matches the subjective experience. 'Unreal feelings' is awkward; 'artificial feelings' is a clearer adjective-noun collocation.

× Just doesn't feel authentic, uh.

✓ It just doesn't feel authentic.

Sentence missing subject: Informal omission of the subject 'It' makes the sentence fragmentary. Add 'It' and remove filler 'uh' for clarity.

× Well, naturally arguments arise.

✓ Well, naturally arguments arise.

This sentence is grammatically correct in present tense and fits the context; no change needed. Included here to indicate it matches the allowed problem list but requires no correction.

× However, to say that I argue with friends with ill intents is completely, I don't know, wrong.

✓ However, to say that I argue with friends with ill intent is completely, I don't know, wrong.

Preposition and noun phrase: Use 'ill intent' (uncountable) rather than 'ill intents'. 'Ill intent' is the standard collocation. The rest is spoken style; keep informal phrasing if desired.