Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and clear: start with a direct topic sentence, avoid hesitation sounds (uh, um), correct grammar (e.g., "It gives me a fresh mind" -> "It refreshes me"), and limit to 3–4 well-linked sentences. Use linking words (for example, "because", "so"). Add a brief specific detail (how you chat and when) to make the answer more informative.

例: Yes — I chat with my friends very often because it helps me relax and refresh my mind. For example, we usually message or call each other several times a week, often after classes or in the evenings. Because we are close, these conversations help me unwind and stay connected.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and then specific details linked logically. Correct grammar and word choice (e.g., "we three of them normally completed degree" -> "the three of us have finished our degrees"). Use linking phrases ("for example", "we discuss") and avoid repetition. Mention one or two concrete topics or examples to show depth.

例: We mainly talk about our future plans because the three of us have just finished our degrees. For example, we discuss possible career paths, which companies to apply for, and how to prepare for interviews. We also share small personal updates and gossip occasionally to stay in touch.

提案: Start with a direct preference ("I prefer chatting with a small group of two close friends") then give concise reasons and specific examples. Avoid repetition ("childhood" twice) and filler words. Use linking words like "because" and "for example" to make the answer coherent and include one short illustrative detail.

例: I prefer chatting with a small group — usually two close friends — because we have known each other since childhood. For example, we travel together and feel comfortable discussing personal or family issues, so our conversations are open and supportive.

提案: Give a clear preference and support it with specific, balanced reasons. Avoid absolute statements like "social media is fake"; instead compare pros and cons. Reduce hesitations and improve grammar ("face to face" -> "face-to-face"). Keep it to 2–3 sentences with linking words such as "because" and "however".

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because you can see people's expressions and hear their tone, which makes the conversation more genuine. However, I also use social media when meeting in person isn't possible, for quick updates or arranging plans.

提案: Answer directly and give a clear reason with one short example. Improve grammar ("I want to be peace" -> "I want to keep the peace") and remove repetition. Use linking words like "because" or "so" and limit length to 2–3 sentences. Explain briefly how you help solve conflicts to show maturity.

例: No, I usually avoid arguing with my friends because I prefer to keep the peace. If they disagree, I act as a mediator and help them talk it through calmly so our friendship remains strong.

× Yes, of course very often I chat with my friends because it's a relaxing time for me.

✓ Yes, of course, I chat with my friends very often because it is a relaxing time for me.

Word order and punctuation: adverbs of frequency (very often) usually come before the main verb or after the auxiliary. Add commas for clarity and expand contraction for formal correctness. Suggestion: place 'very often' after 'I' or before 'chat' and add commas.

× Uh, I talk to my friends. It's give me a so amazing fresh mind and so relax uh, within one week I'll talk to them, which I think more than three times I will talk to them.

✓ I talk to my friends. It gives me an amazingly fresh mind and makes me feel relaxed. Within one week I talk to them, which I think happens more than three times.

Subject-verb agreement and verb forms: 'It' requires third-person singular 'gives' not 'give'. Use 'amazingly' (adverb) before 'fresh' or use 'an amazingly fresh mind'. 'So relax' is incorrect; use 'makes me feel relaxed'. For frequency, use 'happens more than three times' or 'I talk to them more than three times.'

× Mostly I talk about our future because I have, uh, we three of them normally completed, uh, degree.

✓ Mostly I talk about our future because the three of us have normally completed our degrees.

Incorrect pronoun use and tense: 'we three of them' is incorrect; use 'the three of us'. 'Completed degree' needs plural 'degrees' and present perfect 'have completed' fits if the action is relevant to present. Ensure correct possessive 'our degrees.'

× So we talk about degree, we talk about future.

✓ So we talk about our degrees and about our futures.

Parallel structure and pluralization: use 'our degrees' and 'our futures' (or simply 'our future') to be parallel and pluralize 'degree' to match context. Combine with 'and' for smoother sentence.

× So what we have to do or what we have to go to join the job on what, uh, various job pass and like that we talk and we talk a little bit gossip and.

✓ We discuss what we have to do next, how to apply for jobs, which job opportunities are available, and similar topics. We also gossip a little.

Unclear structure and incorrect verbs: 'have to go to join the job' is awkward. Use 'how to apply for jobs' or 'how to join the workforce.' 'Various job pass' is unclear; replace with 'job opportunities.' End sentence with a clear clause 'We also gossip a little.'

× I talk with group of people, uh, not much people.

✓ I talk with a small group of people, not many people.

Missing article and quantifier errors: 'group' needs 'a' and 'not much people' should be 'not many people' because 'people' is countable. Use 'small group' for clarity.

× It's a only two person for me.

✓ It is only two people for me.

Article and number agreement: 'a only two person' is incorrect. Remove 'a' and pluralize 'person' to 'people'. Better: 'It is only two people.'

× It was, uh, I think it's childhood friends since my childhood, uh, childhood.

✓ They are my childhood friends; we have been friends since childhood.

Tense and redundancy: 'It was' is incorrect. Use present 'They are my childhood friends' and present perfect 'have been friends since childhood' to express ongoing friendship. Remove redundant 'childhood.'

× They are travel with me and they are so amazing.

✓ They travel with me and they are very kind/amazing.

Verb form and word choice: 'are travel' is incorrect; use simple present 'travel.' 'So amazing' is acceptable but 'very kind' may be clearer. Ensure verb agrees with subject.

× They know about me and I know about them.

✓ They know me and I know them.

Prepositional use: 'know about' suggests general information; for personal relationships use direct object 'know me.' This is more natural in English.

× So we chat all the things in family problems or their family problems and.

✓ So we chat about everything, including family problems or their family issues.

Preposition and article use: use 'chat about' and 'everything' instead of 'all the things.' Add 'including' to introduce examples. 'Family issues' is more natural than 'family problems.'

× I am so comfortable for the face to face because in face to face, we see the emotions and we see the laughing and how they are expressing their feeling.

✓ I am more comfortable face-to-face because in person we can see emotions, laughter, and how they express their feelings.

Preposition and noun forms: use 'comfortable with' or 'comfortable face-to-face.' 'See the laughing' should be 'see laughter.' 'Expressing their feeling' should be plural 'feelings.'

× And uh, I like most of them. Uh, I personally I like that only because in social media is like fake because they're not have any feelings, only a chatting.

✓ I personally prefer face-to-face because social media can feel fake; people do not show real feelings, and it is only chatting.

Pronoun and auxiliary verb errors: 'they're not have' is incorrect; use 'they do not show' or 'they don't have.' Improve clarity: 'I like most of them' is vague; 'I prefer face-to-face' is clearer. Use 'it is only chatting' or 'it's just chatting.'

× No, I don't argue with my friends, but they, they two of them argue, I will solve the problem.

✓ No, I don't argue with my friends, but if two of them argue, I try to solve the problem.

Conditional and verb tense: add 'if' to form a conditional. 'They, they two of them argue' is ungrammatical; use 'if two of them argue.' 'I will solve' can be softened to 'I try to solve' for habitual behavior.

× So I don't argue because I want to be peace and relax and so I want to be comfortable with them so I don't argue with them.

✓ So I don't argue because I want to be peaceful and relaxed, and I want to be comfortable with them, so I avoid arguments.

Adjective/adverb and word choice: use 'peaceful' (adjective) and 'relaxed.' 'Be peace' is incorrect. Rephrase to avoid repetition: 'avoid arguments' is more natural.