Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Cải thiện: Rút gọn và ngắt câu cho tự nhiên hơn, tránh lặp từ (ví dụ “share” và “friend” lặp lại). Bổ sung một câu rõ ràng làm luận điểm chính và một hoặc hai chi tiết hỗ trợ ngắn gọn, dùng liên từ để mạch lạc.

例: Yes, I do. Chatting with friends is essential to me because it lets me share experiences and get emotional support. For example, when I’m stressed about exams, talking to my friends helps me relax and find solutions.

提案: Cải thiện: Sắp xếp ý theo cấu trúc câu chủ đề rồi nêu ví dụ cụ thể; tránh liệt kê quá dài không có liên kết. Dùng liên từ như “for example” hoặc “such as” để làm rõ.

例: I usually chat about daily topics. For example, we talk about our studies, plans for the weekend and job-related matters on apps like Facebook and Zalo.

提案: Cải thiện: Câu trả lời rõ ràng và phù hợp — để mạnh hơn, thêm một lý do cụ thể hoặc ví dụ ngắn để minh họa sự khác biệt giữa hai hình thức trò chuyện.

例: I prefer chatting one-on-one because conversations are more private. For instance, I can discuss personal problems with a close friend without worrying about others overhearing.

提案: Cải thiện: Rất tốt — rõ ràng và có lý do. Có thể bổ sung một ví dụ ngắn để cụ thể hoá lợi ích của giao tiếp trực tiếp.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because I can read body language and avoid misunderstandings. For example, when discussing important issues, seeing someone’s facial expressions helps me judge their feelings better.

提案: Cải thiện: Câu trả lời khó hiểu và có lỗi từ vựng (“agree” likely should be “disagree”, “poise” is incorrect). Nên trả lời trực tiếp (có/không), sửa từ vựng, và giải thích ngắn cách xử lý mâu thuẫn với ví dụ cụ thể.

例: Sometimes we disagree, but we usually discuss our points calmly until we reach an agreement. For example, if we argue about project responsibilities, we explain our views and then decide who does which task.

× I think chatting with friends is an indispensable part of my life because it allows me to share, to share experiences with my friends, and it helps me to connect with my friend and help me to step out of comfort.

✓ I think chatting with friends is an indispensable part of my life because it allows me to share experiences with my friends, helps me to connect with my friends, and helps me to step out of my comfort zone.

The sentence had redundancy and incorrect parallel structure. Use gerund phrases consistently and parallel verbs: 'allows me to share experiences', 'helps me to connect', 'helps me to step out'. Also plural 'friends' for consistency and the idiom is 'comfort zone'. Suggestion: maintain parallel verb forms and correct idiomatic expression.

× Well, I usually chat with my friends every day on the apps such as Facebook and Zello and we often talk about everyday things like our studies, plans for weekend and job related issues.

✓ Well, I usually chat with my friends every day on apps such as Facebook and Zello, and we often talk about everyday things like our studies, plans for the weekend, and job-related issues.

Missing article 'the' before 'weekend' and 'on the apps' is better as 'on apps' or 'on apps such as'. Also compound adjective 'job-related' needs a hyphen. Suggestion: add 'the' before 'weekend' and hyphenate compound adjectives.

× I prefer chatting with a friend because conversations are more private and I can share personal experiences comfortably.

✓ I prefer chatting with a friend because conversations are more private and I can share personal experiences comfortably.

Sentence is correct. No pronoun error found. No change needed.

× Well, I prefer communicating face to face because it allows me to read the other person's body language and pick up on subtle cues.

✓ Well, I prefer communicating face to face because it allows me to read the other person's body language and pick up on subtle cues.

Sentence is correct. 'Face to face' is acceptable; alternatively 'face-to-face' as a compound adjective could be hyphenated. No essential preposition error.

× This also helps me to express myself more clearly and avoid misunderstandings.

✓ This also helps me to express myself more clearly and avoid misunderstandings.

Sentence is correct; 'helps' correctly agrees with 'This'. No change needed.

× Umm, sometimes I agree with my friends when we have different opinions about something. But after that we try to explain our poise until we reach an agreement.

✓ Umm, sometimes I disagree with my friends when we have different opinions about something. But after that we try to explain our positions until we reach an agreement.

The speaker used 'agree' incorrectly when meaning 'disagree', and 'poise' is incorrect word choice; the correct word is 'positions'. 'Explain our positions' is the right collocation. Suggestion: use 'disagree' for differing opinions and 'positions' for viewpoints.