Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 발음과 유창성을 향상시키세요. 중복 단어(I I, We we)와 문장 구조 오류를 줄이기 위해 천천히 말하며 문장을 간결하게 구성하세요. 또한 'documentary that can see on mobile device'처럼 어색한 표현은 자연스러운 표현으로 바꾸세요. 구체적으로는 주제문 뒤에 한두 개의 구체적 예시(예: 예능·드라마 제목)와 이유를 덧붙여 문장을 풍부하게 만드세요.

例: Yes, I love chatting with my friends. We usually talk about our favorite TV shows, especially K-dramas, and documentaries we watch on our phones because they’re easy to stream and spark good conversations.

提案: 명확한 주제문을 사용하고 문법과 어휘를 정확히 고치세요. 'named Mohandulian' 같은 표현은 불분명하므로 인물이나 프로그램 이름을 정확히 말하세요. 또한 이유와 예시를 덧붙여 구체성을 높이고, 반복 표현(very fun, very good) 대신 다양한 어휘를 사용하세요.

例: I usually talk about a famous Korean show called Mohandulian, which many people in Korea enjoy. We discuss the characters and plot twists because the storytelling is very engaging and often leads to heated debates.

提案: 의사를 더 명확하고 간결하게 표현하세요. 문장 중복(I I)과 어색한 구문('it is more comfortable when I don't talk')을 고치고 이유를 논리적으로 연결하는 연결어를 사용하세요. 예시를 하나 들어 상황을 설명하면 더 설득력 있습니다.

例: I prefer chatting in a group because I feel relaxed and don’t have to speak all the time. Also, I enjoy listening to others’ stories and opinions, which helps me learn about different perspectives.

提案: 시제와 어휘 사용을 정확히 하세요 ('talked up'는 부자연스럽음). 이유를 논리적으로 정리하고 구체적인 예시(표정, 제스처, 사생활 얘기 가능성)를 넣어 보완하세요. 문장을 간결하게 유지하고 불필요한 반복을 피하세요.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because it’s more enjoyable — you can read facial expressions and gestures, and it feels safer to share personal stories in person.

提案: 의미가 혼동되는 표현('I like fighting with others' vs 'I don't argue')을 정리하세요. 부정문을 명확히 하고 이유를 간단히 제시하세요. 'empathy' 사용은 좋지만 문법적으로 자연스럽게 연결해 표현하세요.

例: No, I don’t argue with my friends. I prefer listening and showing empathy, so I usually try to understand their point of view rather than getting into conflicts.

× Yes, I I love chatting with my friends.

✓ Yes, I love chatting with my friends.

The sentence contains a repeated subject 'I I' which is a redundancy and disrupts sentence structure. Remove the duplicate to form a correct sentence: 'Yes, I love chatting with my friends.' Suggestion: Read sentences aloud to catch repeated words and delete duplicates.

× We we usually talk about our favorite TV shows and documentary that can see on mobile device.

✓ We usually talk about our favorite TV shows and documentaries that we can watch on mobile devices.

Errors include duplicate 'We we', incorrect count agreement 'documentary' (should be plural 'documentaries' to match 'shows'), missing subject for 'can see' and wrong verb 'see' for viewing media, and singular 'mobile device' should be plural or have an article. Correction uses plural nouns and 'watch' with explicit subject. Suggestion: Ensure subject-verb clarity and correct plural forms for lists.

× I usually chat about named Mohandulian in Korean TV shows that is famous for in Korea.

✓ I usually chat about a Korean TV show called Mohandulian that is famous in Korea.

Original has wrong word order and article usage: 'named Mohandulian' should be 'called Mohandulian', and 'Korean TV shows that is famous for in Korea' has subject-verb disagreement and redundant phrase 'in Korea'. Use singular 'show' if referring to one, add article 'a', and correct verb agreement. Suggestion: Place modifiers close to the noun and use correct verb forms (is/are) and avoid redundant locative phrases.

× It's very fun and it's very good to see and we both like them.

✓ It's very fun and very enjoyable to watch, and we both like it.

Problems: 'good to see' is unnatural for TV shows—use 'enjoyable to watch'; pronoun disagreement 'we both like them' conflicts with singular 'it' referring to the show. Use consistent pronoun 'it'. Suggestion: Keep pronouns consistent with their antecedents and choose verbs appropriate for media (watch, enjoy).

× I like to chat with a group of people because it is more comfortable when I don't talk.

✓ I like to chat with a group of people because it is more comfortable than talking one-on-one when I do not have to speak much.

Original 'comfortable when I don't talk' is unclear and compares no clear alternative. Correction clarifies the comparison and intent. Suggestion: Express comparisons explicitly and avoid ambiguous time/condition phrases.

× I I feel more comfortable when I don't chat very much so I like to hear others opinions and others friends stories and or life.

✓ I feel more comfortable when I don't talk much, so I like to hear others' opinions and my friends' stories about their lives.

Errors: duplicate 'I I'; 'chat very much' should be 'talk much'; possessive forms missing (others' opinions, friends' stories); 'and or life' is unclear. Correction uses possessives and clearer phrasing. Suggestion: Use apostrophe for possession and choose a single conjunction ('and' or 'or') appropriately.

× I'd love to communicate face to face because there are more enjoyable things when I talked up with the people face to face and thus I can say more private things when I see the friends with face.

✓ I'd love to communicate face to face because it is more enjoyable to talk with people in person, and I can say more private things when I meet friends face to face.

Issues: tense mismatch ('talked up' incorrect), awkward phrasing ('people face to face', 'see the friends with face'), and unclear connectors. Correction uses present infinitive 'to talk' and standard phrase 'meet friends face to face'. Suggestion: Use idiomatic expressions ('in person', 'meet someone') and keep tense consistent.

× No, I don't argue argue with my friends.

✓ No, I don't argue with my friends.

The verb 'argue' is duplicated creating redundancy. Remove the duplicate to correct the sentence. Suggestion: Proofread to remove repeated words.

× I like fighting with others and I love to do just hearing my friend's story and make empathy with my friends so I don't argue with my friends.

✓ I don't like fighting with others; I prefer just listening to my friends' stories and empathizing with them, so I don't argue with my friends.

Multiple errors: 'I like fighting' contradicts intended meaning; 'love to do just hearing' is ungrammatical—use 'prefer listening' or 'like to listen'; 'make empathy' is incorrect—use 'empathize' or 'show empathy'; possessive 'friend's' should be plural 'friends'' if referring to multiple friends. Correction clarifies intent and uses correct verbs. Suggestion: Use verb forms 'listen' and 'empathize' and ensure possessive plurals when referring to multiple friends.