Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is natural and covers reasons and personal detail, but it is slightly long and contains some redundancy (e.g., “my friends, my colleagues, my mother” and repeating ideas about repetition). To improve, make the response more concise, keep to a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., “because,” “for example”). Also correct small phrasing issues (e.g., “I need to repeat my story” instead of “needs”).

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with friends because it helps me relieve stress. For example, I often call my best friend after a long day to vent about work, and talking it through usually makes me feel calmer.

提案: Good range of topics and enthusiasm, but the answer is repetitive and a little unfocused. Reduce repetition, use linking words to structure the list, and give one specific example to make it concrete. Aim for clearer phrasing (e.g., “we can discuss anything, from politics to fashion”).

例: With my best friend I talk about almost anything; for instance, we might discuss politics in the morning and then switch to fashion or celebrity news later. We also share details about our day, like what happened at work.

提案: You give a clear preference depending on mood, but the answer has incomplete sentences, some awkward phrasing (e.g., “top my heart out,” “known person”), and unnecessary repetition. To improve, state the main idea clearly, support it with two concise reasons, and avoid trailing off. Use natural expressions like “open up” and “low on social energy.”

例: It depends on my mood. If I’m low on social energy I prefer one close friend because I can open up easily; however, when I feel energetic I enjoy group conversations for their variety and fun banter.

提案: You express a clear preference and reason, which is good, but there are small grammar issues and word choice problems (e.g., “in person person,” “tone refers reflects your intention”). Tighten the language, use one or two linking words, and give a brief example to illustrate your point.

例: I prefer face-to-face communication because tone and body language are clearer. For example, when discussing something sensitive I like to meet in person so I can read the other person’s expressions and avoid misunderstandings.

提案: You answer directly and give a recent example, which strengthens your response. However, there is some hesitation and informal or awkward phrasing (“we just got into a pickle,” “gossiping about other person”). Improve by smoothing hesitations, using clearer vocabulary, and briefly explaining the resolution to show maturity.

例: Yes, friends sometimes argue. For example, last week I confronted a friend who was gossiping about someone; we discussed why it was hurtful and then reconciled, which actually improved our friendship.

× I usually chat with my friends, my colleagues, my mother.

✓ I usually chat with my friends, my colleagues, and my mother.

Missing conjunction 'and' before the last item in a list is an issue with sentence structure and coordination; add 'and' to make the list grammatically complete and clear.

× I believe it helps me relieve my stress.

✓ I believe it helps me relieve my stress.

This sentence is grammatically correct; no change needed. Included for completeness.

× I am a person who needs to repeat my story 10 times before I can fully get over it, and I am lucky enough that all of my friends have enough patience to bear with me.

✓ I am a person who needs to repeat my story ten times before I can fully get over it, and I am lucky that all of my friends have enough patience to bear with me.

Use words for small numbers in formal speech/writing (style) and 'lucky enough that' is wordy; 'lucky that' is clearer. 'Bear with me' is correct; the issue was style and redundancy rather than grammar.

× With my best friend, I can talk on any topic, and it is and it surely has a wide variety, wide variety.

✓ With my best friend, I can talk about any topic, and we cover a wide variety of subjects.

Problems: incorrect preposition 'on' should be 'about'; repetition 'it is and it surely has' is disfluent; 'wide variety' needs an object ('of subjects' or 'of topics'). This is a sentence structure and preposition issue; simplify and correct preposition.

× Within a few seconds we can discuss from our politics to like fashion, celebrities, anything we talk about, basically everything we specially share about our day.

✓ Within a few seconds we can discuss everything from politics to fashion and celebrities; basically, we share everything about our day.

Incorrect use of 'discuss from' — 'discuss' pairs with 'everything from X to Y'. Remove filler 'like' and reorder for clarity. 'Specially' is wrong in this context; use 'basically' or 'especially' depending on meaning.

× It depends on my mood.

✓ It depends on my mood.

Correct as is; included for completeness.

× Sometimes I just want my one friend with whom I have enough comfort living that I can top my heart out.

✓ Sometimes I just want to be with one friend with whom I feel comfortable enough to pour my heart out.

Problems: word order and wrong verb 'top' instead of 'pour'; 'comfort living' is incorrect — should be 'feel comfortable'. This is sentence structure and word choice; rewrite to use idiomatic expression 'pour my heart out.'

× Sometimes it is better to mingle in a group and discuss about interesting topics.

✓ Sometimes it is better to mingle in a group and discuss interesting topics.

'Discuss' does not take the preposition 'about'; use direct object 'discuss interesting topics.' This is a preposition error.

× But it mostly depends on my mood.

✓ But it mostly depends on my mood.

Grammatically correct; included for completeness.

× If I am running low on my social battery then I want my known person and if I'm in the.

✓ If I am running low on social energy, I want to be with someone I know; if I'm not, I prefer a group.

Original sentence is incomplete and colloquial ('social battery', 'known person', trailing 'if I'm in the.'). This is a sentence structure error and needs completion and clearer vocabulary. Replace 'social battery' with 'social energy' and 'known person' with 'someone I know.'

× I am in person person because I believe the tone cannot be assessed through text or social media post or stories.

✓ I prefer in-person communication because I believe tone cannot be assessed through text messages or social media posts and stories.

Problems: 'in person person' is wrong repetition; need adjective 'in-person' or phrase 'in-person communication'; pluralize 'posts' and specify 'text messages.' This is adjective/adverb usage and number agreement.

× The tone refers reflects your intention and when I can judge the other person's intention, it is better for me to communicate clearly.

✓ Tone reflects a person's intention, and when I can judge the other person's intention, it is easier for me to communicate clearly.

Redundant verbs 'refers reflects'; awkward phrasing 'it is better for me to communicate clearly.' Use 'reflects' and change second clause to 'it is easier for me' for clarity. This is a pronoun/word choice and redundancy issue.

× Certainly and I believe it is very common for friends to argue or fight.

✓ Certainly; I believe it is very common for friends to argue or fight.

Starting with 'Certainly and' is incorrect coordination. Use a semicolon or start a new sentence. This is conjunction/linking error.

× I just I remember last week my friend was gossiping about other person and I told her not to and we just got into a pickle.

✓ I remember last week my friend was gossiping about another person, I told her not to, and we got into a disagreement.

Problems: repeated 'I just I', 'other person' should be 'another person', 'got into a pickle' is idiomatic but informal; restructure into a clear compound sentence. This is sentence structure and pronoun/determiner error.

× But I believe it's healthy and it's part of friendships so it's OK.

✓ But I believe it's healthy and part of friendship, so it's okay.

'Part of friendships' is acceptable but 'part of friendship' is more natural; 'OK' -> 'okay'. Minor stylistic/pronoun issue and consistency.

× You can always reconcile and move ahead.

✓ You can always reconcile and move on.

'Move ahead' is not wrong, but 'move on' is the more natural collocation after reconciliation. This is a style/sentence structure suggestion.