Chatting— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is quite long and somewhat unclear due to grammatical errors and redundancy. Try to keep your response concise and clear, directly answering the question with a topic sentence followed by supporting details. Avoid filler words and unclear phrases to improve naturalness and effectiveness.

例: Yes, I enjoy chatting with my friends because it helps me relax and feel happy, especially when I'm feeling lonely or stressed. Talking to them makes my life feel more stable and positive.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence, and the vocabulary is limited and sometimes incorrect. Use linking words to connect your ideas logically and provide specific examples of topics you discuss. Keep sentences clear and avoid incomplete thoughts.

例: We usually chat about various topics like fashion, interior design, and our hobbies. For example, I often talk about wildlife and forests, which I find fascinating.

提案: Your answer shows enthusiasm but is confusing due to unclear phrasing and grammar mistakes. Focus on structuring your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details, using linking words to improve coherence. Use correct grammar and vocabulary relevant to the context.

例: I prefer chatting with a group of people because I enjoy socialising and hearing different opinions. It also helps to solve problems more effectively when multiple people share their ideas.

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and unclear. Try to express your preferences clearly with well-structured sentences and avoid repetition. Use linking words to contrast your preferences and provide reasons for each.

例: When I feel stressed or sad, I prefer to communicate via social media because it's easier to express my emotions. However, when I feel good and stable, I enjoy face-to-face conversations for more meaningful interactions.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and unclear expressions. Try to use clear and correct sentences, provide reasons for arguments, and conclude positively. Use linking words to connect ideas logically.

例: Yes, sometimes I argue with my friends because we have different opinions and beliefs. However, despite disagreements, we still care for each other and enjoy communicating.

× Yes, of course I like chatting with my friends.

✓ Yes, of course, I like chatting with my friends.

A comma is needed after 'of course' to separate the introductory phrase from the main clause, improving sentence clarity.

× It's like one of my hobbies to do that because you know, when I feel Bo birthday, when I feel uh lonely, I let's chat with them.

✓ It's like one of my hobbies to do that because, you know, when I feel lonely, I chat with them.

The phrase 'Bo birthday' is unclear and likely incorrect; 'let's chat' is incorrect here as 'let's' means 'let us'. The correct form is 'I chat with them' to express a habitual action. Also, commas improve sentence flow.

× They make me feel relaxed. They feel like me feel happy and uh feel everything in my life.

✓ They make me feel relaxed. They make me feel happy and feel everything in my life.

The verb 'feel' should be preceded by 'make me' to correctly express causation. 'They feel like me feel' is incorrect and confusing.

× It's like stable.

✓ It feels stable.

'Stable' is an adjective and needs a linking verb like 'feels' to form a correct sentence.

× So that's hard for me because you know, I have something like a dark map.

✓ So that's hard for me because, you know, I have something like a dark mood.

The phrase 'dark map' is likely a mispronunciation or error; 'dark mood' fits the context better. Also, commas improve clarity.

× Oh there are so much something to chat in, such as fashion, designing the space, the also what life we love to chat about it because our me and my friend, we have multiple hobbies, multiple things we like to communicate with it like such as when I tell you old life forests, the animals, the.

✓ Oh, there are so many things to chat about, such as fashion, designing spaces, and also life. My friends and I have multiple hobbies and many things we like to talk about, like wildlife, forests, and animals.

'So much something' is incorrect; 'so many things' is appropriate for countable nouns. The sentence is fragmented and unclear; restructuring improves clarity and grammar. 'Our me and my friend' is incorrect; 'My friends and I' is correct.

× No, yes, of course, because my when I talk a little while about myself or myself, it's like communicate.

✓ Yes, of course, because when I talk a little about myself, it's like communicating.

The sentence is confusing and contains redundant words. Removing 'No' and the repeated 'myself' clarifies meaning. 'It's like communicate' should be 'it's like communicating' to use the gerund form correctly.

× I love to chat with the group, to have multiple opinion, multiple just something to discuss with each other.

✓ I love to chat with a group, to have multiple opinions, and just things to discuss with each other.

'Multiple opinion' should be plural 'multiple opinions'. 'The group' is changed to 'a group' to generalise. 'Multiple just something' is unclear; 'just things' is clearer.

× Also if there's have something wrong, there's have multiple people can't solve.

✓ Also, if there is something wrong, multiple people can solve it.

'There's have' is incorrect; the correct form is 'there is'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammatical correctness.

× It's the it's the band.

✓ It's the bond.

'Band' is likely a mispronunciation or error; 'bond' fits the context better. The repetition is removed for clarity.

× What what I feel in this, in the moment when I feel stressed, when I feel bad, when I feel sad.

✓ What I feel at this moment when I feel stressed, bad, or sad.

Repetition of 'what' is removed. 'In this, in the moment' is corrected to 'at this moment' for proper preposition use.

× I love to prefer in the social media because I don't like to to my emotion express myself in the real world.

✓ I prefer social media because I don't like to express my emotions in the real world.

'Love to prefer' is incorrect; 'prefer' alone suffices. 'To to my emotion express myself' is ungrammatical; corrected to 'to express my emotions'.

× But if I feel okay, where I feel everything is stable, I like to communicate face to face, to have their interaction and the reward.

✓ But if I feel okay, when everything is stable, I like to communicate face to face, to have their interaction and the reward.

'Where' is incorrect; 'when' is appropriate for time clauses. The sentence is otherwise acceptable.

× Yes, of course, sometimes I argue with my friend because you know, we have a different opinion, we have different minds, we have different beliefs that this thing is bent about how we are argument.

✓ Yes, of course, sometimes I argue with my friends because, you know, we have different opinions, different minds, and different beliefs about things we argue about.

'Friend' should be plural 'friends' to match context. 'Bent' is incorrect; likely meant 'about'. The sentence is restructured for clarity and grammar.

× Sometimes we cannot have an equal point to stable in it.

✓ Sometimes we cannot reach an agreement on it.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. 'Cannot have an equal point to stable in it' is corrected to a clear, idiomatic expression.

× So we have a big argument.

✓ So we have a big argument.

This sentence is grammatically correct and needs no correction.

× But even this we love each other, we love to communicate.

✓ But even so, we love each other and love to communicate.

'Even this' is incorrect; 'even so' is the correct phrase. The sentence is connected properly with 'and'.